Thought on the Peak

GouletGoulet Posts: 918
edited January 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
If it has no consequence
and the diary pages of every journal
or every notebook
or every mind-state
aren't too chalk-full of already-been-used words,
I think it's important to listen to the way the words sound
and the way the sentence structure
rolls off the tongue
and the direction in which I go or you go
or we all go.
Even to begin by telling a Tall Tale
or some-kind-of dream-nightmare story
seems a little repetitive,
and of course to ruminate about lost love
or found love
or lust
also seems very cliché,
even if to be cliché is to be real.
But I would like to start by saying that my hands are cold
and they ache and creak,
but my fingernails are trimmed,
and my cuticles are pushed back to the brink of beauty,
but I’m not so sure what I'm supposed to do
or what you think I'm supposed to do
or what we're supposed to do.
I realize that in the long run this all may seem like a good idea,
but really it was just about pretty eyes
and sexy lips
and a song that made me smile and you laugh.
So I can dream about sitting in a fetal position
or a lotus position
in the nook of an old evergreen tree
and my ears ebb the oceans
and my eyes twitch and operate on the moon's splitting head,
and my feet nudge and squirm and touch my hands,
and in the dream-state and mind-state
that I occupy at that moment
I feel loose and stringy
and tight and pulled in several directions,
I am a Harpsichord,
I am a Feather Bed.
What if we're all great people,
but we're all so different that it doesn't matter
because your greatness is pitiful to me
and my greatness is cliché and tired
and pathetic and whiny to you.
After you held me in your arms that night
and asked me simple questions
about death and life
and afterlife
and gods and goddesses
and all the philosophers, that I knew about
and you knew about,
I wanted to tell you about my dreams,
about the ones with the Grand Dinosaurs
and the feeble, deaf telephones
and buildings that reached the sky
and how I could jump off them and fall and fall and fall
and you would get lost inside my stories
and maybe want to make love to me
or fall in love with me
or at least kiss me.
In your bed I sleep on the left
and I seem to think that makes me someone special in your life,
someone much more then the best lover ever
or the best looking lover
or the longest lasting lover
or the most intelligent lover,
maybe I could be your rhinoceros horn
or your belly button cord
or the bee that stung you in your eye.
Its just like meditating
when I'm with you,
and life is just waiting for death,
and sleep is just dreaming about dying
during a long journey,
and words move in and out of mouths
and in and out of pens and pencils,
but I can't quite find the right ones.
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  • :) You've re-materialized! Beautiful! Nice to see you back! My English teacher told me "That Goulet, he'll be back someday!".
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    "and my cuticles are pushed back to the brink of beauty"

    and you're shadow boxing
    while the clothes dry
    and so much humming
    in the world
    it's difficult to hear
    what the heart
    is
    saying....

    god i love the seashorey dali scapes,
    the dream aches
    the word choices
    and tactile feel of hands

    and we're talking
    and it seems to go on & on
    but that's ok cuz it's rhythmic
    and rhythm matters
    most in a sea
    of redundant
    aches and kisses

    and mostly i like it when your lines
    tumble out of bed
    and wake up somewhere in the middle of my elbows
    and secondly
    i like best the way you make me remember
    pencils and eardrums and why i write poetry ~~~
  • Star Wars references: 0%
    Friday the 13th references: 0%
    Awesomicity: 300%

    heh, I guess you pass.
  • Originally posted by Goulet


    What if we're all great people.

    maybe I could be your rhinoceros horn
    or your belly button cord
    or the bee that stung you in your eye.

    I couldn't compete with that. A++++++, my friend. :)
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    I thought it was a little long
    but my attention span is short
    and i'm not so smart

    but i do maybe live in a town called Crystal Lake
    so i think that redeems me with at least one person
  • Originally posted by Goulet
    but i do maybe live in a town called Crystal Lake
    so i think that redeems me with at least one person
    If you did and you were sexing, Jason would've told me.

    Just seeing you post again redeems all :)
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    Goulet~~i think your original is Awesome and shows the fluidity of thought and reveals the poem forming itself and building in your mind, and thus priceless...however, most publications still hold to a sub-31 line page/ so as a gorgeous version of condensation i selected my fav lines (which i think highly suitable for submission:)::



    "But I would like to start by saying that my hands are cold
    and they ache and creak,
    but my fingernails are trimmed,
    and my cuticles are pushed back to the brink of beauty,
    but I’m not so sure what I'm supposed to do
    really it was just about pretty eyes
    and sexy lips
    and a song that made me smile and you laugh.
    So I can dream about sitting in a fetal position
    or a lotus position
    in the nook of an old evergreen tree
    and my ears ebb the oceans
    and my eyes twitch and operate on the moon's splitting head,
    and my feet nudge and squirm and touch my hands,
    and [I'm] tight and pulled in several directions,
    I am a Harpsichord,
    I am a Feather Bed.
    I wanted to tell you about my dreams,
    about the ones with the Grand Dinosaurs
    and the feeble, deaf telephones
    and buildings that reached the sky
    and how I could jump off them and fall and fall and fall
    maybe I could be your rhinoceros horn
    or your belly button cord
    or the bee that stung you in your eye.
    Words move in and out of mouths
    and in and out of pens and pencils,
    but I can't quite find the right ones. "



    ***

    Again, these words are certainly the right ones!!
    you did an excellent spin~~so eloquent and metapoetical***
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    cassia--

    I want to you edit everything that I ever write...
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    The insanity is back. Keep off the blow and keep your nose clean this time too. Did somebody leave a gate unlocked? ;)
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    " my greatness is cliche' "

    and

    I don't like the word "Cliche' "
    I think my poetry class last year killed that word,

    Thank you Goulet I liked your piece ALOT!

    "But I would like to start by saying that my hands are cold
    and they ache and creak"
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    I'm smoking some dope tonite no mater what

    BLAME IT ON THE RAIN
    TIGRESS
    TIGRESS
    TIGRESS

    i smack my lips on you

    you're a devil girl
  • dyaogirldyaogirl Posts: 138
    Originally posted by Goulet
    cassia--

    I want to you edit everything that I ever write...


    GOOD CALL!!!!!
    '..... Ah! A perfect illustration of the poststructuralist paradox. Does the signifier "Merlot" correspond with the 'truth' of the bottle I polished off last night, or do we hold in our thoughts a different "signified" of bottle-of-Merlot-ness? Perhaps we're dreaming of the same bottle!" -FinsburyParkCarrots

  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    thai stick tigress in an oolong rain,
    panama red siberian striped
    relaxations to a drizzled moon
    yowz

    all ye lil devils shimmy up now
    gonna cool smooth oceans
    all through the night
    of stars and cows and rainbows
    dream-warped silhouettes
    grooved
    on rust
    and sunshadows...

    (whee) oops, it's not yet friday :)

    get yr heapin spoonfuls of love etouffee

    party on, yr royal loungekins goulet gold
  • Ezra Pound edited a 148 line poem down to just two. I think it went something like:

    This apparition of faces in a crowd:
    Petals on the wet, black bough.

    Sometimes, if you can condense even your best work down to one powerful couplet, you've created truly transcendent poetry.
  • Hey, cassia,
    didn't see you there....
    thanks for the PMs! There were FIVE!!!!! That's how I like them...copious.:)
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    i'm a whore
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Nice to meet you. Oh my zipper is down. ;)
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    maybe i should put some pants on

    are you guys all dressed?
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    chew it up
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    I think I'm a fucking awesome poet.
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    i agree :D
    It's all yellow.


  • Originally posted by Goulet
    I think I'm a fucking awesome poet.

    Good. I actually think I'm shit. But there you go.

    No...I've really enjoyed the discussion, goulet. You ask the right questions. We are the BBC Radio 3 of the board: we are a recondite institution.
  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    this one's about juggling and intercourse.
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