What a Disappointing Vision Reality Becomes

Barroom Hero
Barroom Hero Posts: 76
edited June 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
What a disappointing vision reality becomes
when romance confronts its objective wall?
The spectacle of something better overcomes
the expectations of life's slow crawl.

Dreaming of more receives the frown
of one whose pride knows no bound.
For me it's better to receive the crown
of free joy than plots of ground.

Resentment in return for a righteous life?
What meaning comes in the form of strife!
Liberal Douchebags that Blame Bush for Everything are Useless Pieces of Trash. I Shit on You.
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  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Originally posted by Barroom Hero


    Dreaming of more receives the frown



    sad
  • Barroom Hero
    Barroom Hero Posts: 76
    Originally posted by PastaNazi
    sad

    I guess so.

    Sometimes, within sadness, there's also understanding that couldn't be gained through any other feeling.
    Liberal Douchebags that Blame Bush for Everything are Useless Pieces of Trash. I Shit on You.
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    still... it's hard to reconcile a dream for the greater good that is rejected

    we can come to understand
    and forgive
    but stop dreaming?

    ouch

    how do we move on to new dreams?
  • suede
    suede Posts: 247
    i keep reading this as
    "when a disappointing vision becomes reality"
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    all the hippies driving around with "Question Reality" bumper stickers...


    hm.
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    an interesting piece... and one which, under the a different perspective, could be used for and against judeo-christian ethic.

    never was much for the alter-sonnet but you do well.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by setaside2

    never was much for the alter-sonnet but you do well.

    Screech of tyres, wail of siren, eeek of brake, slam of car door, patter of steelcaps on concrete, knock on Hut door, opening of Hut door, speech by poetry police Detective Chief Superintendent O' Carrott of Finsbury Park Station:

    "Carrott here. Defender of the Word. Setaside Two: I hereby arrest you on the charge of confusing a ten line poem of varying metre (line one alone comprising four trochees and three iambs, rather than the standard five iambs) with any kind of sonnet, "alter-" or otherwise. This poem is so 'alter-' it's a 'non', in the sonnets stakes, Sir. Now, I'll ask you to come along with me quietly ... to the pub, where lots of good beer will be consumed over talk of good natured rivalry between poets that served gently to pressure them into producing their finest works...all the way through the centuries."

    :D:D:D

    By the way. Another good poem, Barroom. The poetry forum may become a veritable cultural Hibernocracy yet! ;)
  • FancyFacade
    FancyFacade Posts: 330
    awesome - love it, thank you for sharing
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    take me to trial, finsy, because an alter can be whatever it pleases. I'll hang myself over that if I have to. and never mind whether or not syllabic count is the same or iambs matching modern rules and regulations. Another limitation. Bah.

    and you never could take a joke. too easily baited, sir. More than ME even.

    :p
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Note to self: seta is a comedian now.

    Note to seta: "The Iliad" was written in dactyllic hexameter. Pretty old rules being applied tharrrrr...

    :D
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Can an alter- cat be a dog?

    :p
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Originally posted by setaside2
    More than ME even.


    my quintenssential raised eyebrown in your general direction...


    sire
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    Can an alter- cat be a dog?

    :p

    genetically speaking...

    without question.

    you have apparently never seen the transformers.

    however an altar/cat is a 50's preacher.

    ha-ha

    note to self. not funny.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • Barroom Hero
    Barroom Hero Posts: 76
    I have an entire poetry packet here, so I plan on becoming more aquainted with it over the summer.

    I do appreciate the education I'm receiving from my own poetry, though. It only helps.

    I AM just a hippy, ya know.
    Liberal Douchebags that Blame Bush for Everything are Useless Pieces of Trash. I Shit on You.
  • Buru
    Buru Posts: 8,473
    I enjoyed reading this one Barroom
    :)
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?

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