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  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    love the new pearl jam song, love the title "Worldwide Suicide" must find lyrics
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    Paper Waits

    a visual blizzard
    fatalist swim
    the sea, letters and me
    peering in ethereals
    wasteland midnight chrome draped me
    in this storybook black
    bored with everything
    white light petals
    pushing through
    looking back
    flowering snowflake star
    icewater dew
    streaming down grid cathedrals
    and chasms, the deepest immense
    who knew the symbol of winter's fit
    the chase of background noise
    I want a parade of a violin and toys
    to play me the universe
    throwing away the bad things
    and bad dreams
    my body is adrift ...
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    anyway my good stuff is slowly coming together at firehorsepoetry.com
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    my sad captain

    Words by Thom Gunn

    The shadow of a pine-branch quivered
    On a sunlit bank of pale unflowering weed.
    I watched, more solid by the pine,
    The dark exactitude that light delivered,
    And, from obsession, or from greed,
    Labored to make it mine.

    In looking for the words, I found
    Bright tendrils, round which that sharp outline faltered:
    Limber detail, no bloom disclosed.
    I was still separate on the shadow's ground
    But, charged with growth, was being altered,
    Composing uncomposed.
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    maybe Lennon was referring to the good Gunn

    Love "Words"
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    in imaginary neon lights, firehorsepoetry.com
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    Paper Waits

    A visual blizzard
    a fatalist swims
    the sea letters,
    appearing at ethereals rim
    wasteland winters fit
    onscreen
    midnight chrome
    drapes scene
    in this storybook black
    we envelope boredom
    and attack
    its blades
    of white light petals
    pushing through
    cycle it back
    flowering snowflake
    your are icewater
    stars strewn
    and streaming sad
    down grid cathedral
    mountains and immense
    the chasms, mad...
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    sevens
    section
    seduction U
    26
    3
    tix
    numerology
    what does it mean
    smiles
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    I just love the word
    we're all good
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Hey, john girl. Good to see you around. Got some new poetry for us? :)
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    But I finally figured out Pink Floyd's The Wall !!!
    I amtalking to the fucking wall
    The Wall is fascism or some type of domination, fuck yeah! For 20 years I thought it was the heart, and yeah, some part of the wall I still believe is the heart...

    p.s. the Avocado Highway rocks!

    Death to Exxon, you motherfuckers!
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    i love my husband because I am runnin' around the apt. screamin I'm outta my mind, I'm outta my mind, yellin' old obsessions about Pink Floyd and he just laughs and watches me post, no really he just reads Spin mag...
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    Have declared Class Warfare on us little people'
    watch your backs
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    Eye contact
    is made while
    I drive by
    in my near empty
    dusty mercurial chariot
    I flip the illegals
    waiting patiently
    outside of a Home Depot parking lot
    the peace sign

    Hearing aid
    is an AT@T customer service representitive
    laughing at my combative paranoid drunken barrage
    of complaints and questions regarding federal surcharges on my bill
    and whom I am dialing, Hey, any privacy, et al
    I say this is Party Line Piracy...
  • john girl wrote:
    Eye contact
    is made while
    I drive by
    in my near empty
    dusty mercurial chariot
    I flip the illegals
    waiting patiently
    outside of a Home Depot parking lot
    the peace sign

    Hearing aid
    is an AT@T customer service representitive
    laughing at my combative paranoid drunken barrage
    of complaints and questions regarding federal surcharges on my bill
    and whom I am dialing, Hey, any privacy, et al
    I say this is Party Line Piracy...

    johngirl, that 2nd stanza kicks! :)

    Previously you were talking to The Wall...now, I thought we saw it fall but it didn't fall at all, that wall...they just picked up the bricks, you see, they're real slick (the pricks!!!) and carried them to another town, as we rejoiced at it coming down. The news media, you see, is selling the stories they want you to believe but more and more the holes are showing, more and more, the lies are growing and the people are waking up and knowing that there's something amiss, let's hope and let's wish something's done before it's our last kiss! ;)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • omg... it has been ages

    honestly, $ + technical problems = depression = poetry decompression for me
    attempting submissions

    a Summer of Kabuki

    ...recent dreams
    3 nights ago
    that "the Jim M." gave me a private concert in a private club
    he's on the mike solo, singing The End...

    2 nights ago
    I and my daughter are visiting strangers closets, (3 to be exact), looking for luggage so as to pack up with our clothing, meanwhile, I have 2 tix to Paris in which I am holding and I am calling the airport apoligizing to daughter and airline from each closet to delay our flight...hmm



    PS! PJ! loved seeing them live in SD this last JULY Eddie and I were on the wine wavelength COOL my 1st PJ show...

    LONG LIVE TRESTLES
    big waves baby
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    2 marguerita's an 3 shots of tequila and 40, thought for sure i was a goner before today

    ain't nothing inspiriring to write about lately,
    is everbody dead ?
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    no one gives a shit
    don't you get it about
    politics
    you bitch
    about anorexia

    nothing
    gets
    something
    at least the
    real vote
    regards
    done I care
    these
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    can't you finish any thought wtihout f'n it up?
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    I Care About These About These ,our Votes, Dammit!!!
    Majority Rules
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