Setaside's Poetry.... if you like...

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  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    dude... y'all rock
  • suede
    suede Posts: 247
    i started to read from the beginning of this thread & made it througha few pages. enjoyable reads for the most part. yeah, some were long, but so are some of my poems, so are some from the others...it's just part of writing, there is no length police in writing, so don't worry about it.
    my favorite line was the one about the candy wrapper hitting the street...i forget the name of the poem.

    i also like the idea for the pearl jam poetry press publication. i don't know how well that would fly with the band though and using their name. i know they are great guys, but it seems like a legal hassle.

    keep writing, even if it's just for your own personal gain. i wouldn't place much value into what others might think or not think of your work. keep a level head and don't get full of yourself and be one of the good ones. :)

    anyways...i'm just taking a break from crazy and my homework
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    I chose page 5 to go back to, today, and oddly... I find I've missed one... Of course Lunar Echo begged for attention, but you know, who am I to pick favorites? :)

    and

    where is that Savannah66chick, anyway?

    My dear Sir, 'tis YOU rizzocking zi hizzouwze, btw... I like being on top, but it's your turn today. ACK! my PC!!!! Save me! Kisses... Me
    Originally posted by setaside2
    I dedicate it to Savannah66 who is fighting the good fight.

    And, I realize that this is different from my usual stuff, but it is real and it was real and I really did tip 45% that night. I'd do it again. Especially if my waitress was a girl named savannah....


    MOTHER/dirty wash cloth

    Waitress
    They said
    White trash
    Poor
    They said
    She served me well
    Not that I’m chauvinistic or anything
    But
    Hell
    I felt like royalty
    She deserved a tip
    Didn’t trip
    And even yelled at those people behind us
    Who got so annoying
    Words failed me
    For a change
    Brown hair
    Withered smile
    Mother to all that pay witness
    Caring beyond our right to receive
    “Punctuality is optional,”
    She said with a small smile
    “When you have to rely upon line cooks.”
    We laughed courteously
    Only a few of us truly understanding
    Where she was coming from
    Which was off her last break
    Something like sixteen hundred
    Hours ago
    She smiled again
    And shuffled off to some other destination
    Lighting up the much needed cigarette
    A silent discussion
    Aside
    With the apparent manager
    A haggard looking man
    Occurred
    In which we found her name to be Julia
    A twenty-something
    On the road to somewhere
    In no particular hurry it seems
    But with import
    And persistence
    She was light on her feet
    In the heavy hours of the early morn
    A ballerina in servitude
    Pinocchio on strings
    On her way to the real
    Real
    And she was the best
    That I
    In my fascinated haze
    Gave her 45%
    Only because fifty would have broken me
    She touched my hear with a menu
    And limitless freefloating time
    Her blue eyes sparkled
    And I don’t think
    I’ve ever had
    A cleaner table.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I look forward to reading new poems, soon. I have been anticipating a renaissance of creative industry from you since the weekend, seta, and I hope to read more.

    Cheers, mate,
    Finsbury.
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i look foward to new poems, too
    and new dreams
    now arriving... gate 4

    15 1/2 days, baby... ever ridden a horse? maybe a 4 x 4 will do... we'll see... nice book, btw... glad to take up a page or two... kisses... me
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    fuyfcsw
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    (these are not mine, fya'si)

    You know, and I’ve been wondering, you know, all the way home
    whether the world will see I'm a better man than others by far.
    You know, I’ve had it so good, how loathsome, and not quite my style.
    Work and vanity wasted my time inside, oh, you see me in a cardigan
    and a dress, dress, dress that I’ve been sick on.
    Oh, how are you? Can't say I really care at the end of it all,
    actually, oh, well there's something I’ve found, it's that we're just flesh and blood
    and well, now, just one thing I’ve found, it's that we're just flesh and blood.

    And you know, and I’ve been wondering, you know, all the way home
    whether the world will see I'm a better man than others by far.
    Ooh, how are you? I shan't say I really care at the end of it all,
    actually oh, there is something I’ve found, it's that we're just flesh and blood,
    well, now, there's one thing I’ve found, it's that we're just skin and bones.

    Actually oh, there's something I’ve found, it's that we're just flesh and blood
    and you're nothing much more, there's something, just something I’ve found
    it's that we're just flesh and blood and we're nothing much more.
    Oh no, what did I do wrong, individual doubts.
    Just one thing I’ve found, we're just flesh and blood,
    nothing much more, something, just something I’ve found that we're skin and bones.
  • Sea
    Sea Posts: 3,125
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