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votre sourire de mona lisa

trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
it seems like i drank all night
but really i just waited instead
walking away in space
my eyes are closed but dancing
the flickering of a nearby candle
faces fading and a mona lisa smile
wrapped around a wooden pole
telephone wires overhead
conversations about bigger dreams
everything less than passion
releasing hope and in between
scratching letters - my eyes are open
inescapable pattern of differences
singing someone else's song
wrong way turn - one way wishing well
tranquility found another path
falling stars and promises attached
for tomorrow's new hampshire sunrise
when you can give me everything
and take it all away for nothing
I'll dig a tunnel
from my window to yours
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  • AbookamongstthemanyAbookamongstthemany Posts: 8,209
    wow dominic, you always amaze me.
    If you want to tell people the truth, make them laugh, otherwise they'll kill you.

    Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth.
    -Oscar Wilde
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    quite nice, indeed :)
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I like the idea of the telephone wires overhearing conversations about bigger dreams...very good! :) And man, the line "one way wishing well", that really hit me! To me, it's like a wishing well full of broken dreams this "one way wishing well"--sucking all those good wishes down into a void...I know it's dark but I like dark and that's how I pictured it. :) This was a sad and lonely poem--you expressed yourself very well! :) Thanks for sharing!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    When you can give me everything and take it all away for nothing....

    Love it;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    thank you all so very much! i appreciate it -

    one way wishing well...it's my favorite line -
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
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