Black and Brown Feathers (12 January 2006)

trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
she sits across from me in the wooden booth
the girl with the stars at the corner of her eyes
original aqua-marine blue and outlined in black
she took my magazine as deftly as she long
ago took the strings of this tiny heart and tied a bow
another day lost in thought under lonely covers
i recall when you wanted to share your music
with me because being with me felt like home
you're the swan and i'm left in the lake to dream
adorned with the black and brown feathers of war
you're the moon that's always wished for on wednesday
and i'm the sun from which everyone is hiding
"when do we fall in line and admit that it's right
to be ourselves in masks and overcoats in the rain?"
myth tells us that the truth is, we all fall down
I'll dig a tunnel
from my window to yours
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  • I think I'll have to read this one a few times, trapped but I like it. To me, it's sad. Almost comes across like the person is accepting his fate, in a way---if that makes any sense. I got that feeling anyway, especially in reading the last line.

    I was really digging this line:
    "you're the moon that's always wished for on wednesday
    and i'm the sun from which everyone is hiding" - I just love it! :)

    I'm always left wondering after reading your offereings and that, dear sir, is a good thing! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • well, thank you. i wrote it with a dixie cup next to me.
    I think I'll have to read this one a few times, trapped but I like it. To me, it's sad. Almost comes across like the person is accepting his fate, in a way---if that makes any sense. I got that feeling anyway, especially in reading the last line.

    I was really digging this line:
    "you're the moon that's always wished for on wednesday
    and i'm the sun from which everyone is hiding" - I just love it! :)

    I'm always left wondering after reading your offereings and that, dear sir, is a good thing! :)
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    I think this is my favorite of yours to date.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. Haiku wrote:
    I think this is my favorite of yours to date.

    the duck reference? is that why? i'm having a good day reading some stuff on here.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    strings of this tiny heart and tied a bow

    This first got me.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. Haiku wrote:
    strings of this tiny heart and tied a bow

    This first got me.

    it's funny how those things come about.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
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