About Nothing and No One (06 November 2006)

trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
you showed me your picture...the one before
the rapture, or the ruptured rapport
you were new with your baby blues
you're a falling leaf...the only grief
that has ever followed me into the dream.
one before the fall. sticking your head
in a fan turned to high...coldest setting.
open your mouth to no one home and wait.
your wings are making the waves.
you're the moon, the stars, the wind.
the darkest point in the sky is why
i lie awake at night and wonder if
we ever can make it...up against the grain.
one before the fall. a black nail polish,
chipped from holding yourself up
and picking up your broken wings; the
ones you didn't tear off yourself -
the first and last thing they took from you.
the only thing i know to say,
right now, is, "you're beautiful,"
but, somehow, that doesn't seem to be
enough and i'm lost without you here.
all the ripples lead back to the ocean
and to missing out on the life
that you thought you never had.

(this was originally titled "Too Beautiful", with the same date stamp that you all are accustomed to seeing with me. but, i didn't want it to seem sappy. i wrote this the other night, based on the quote line. i really like this. i hope you do too.)


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nothing more than nothing less than the best of the only things that you ever offered me off the cuft in a run down booth in a checkered table cloth restaurant in Queens
I'll dig a tunnel
from my window to yours
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Comments

  • I never have a hard time imagining moving pictures in my head when I read your poems, trapped. In this, I liked that you repeated "one before the fall" and that you started off with "the one before the rapture". I love the word rapture and it really effectively describes, in a sexy way, the way one can get so wrapped (rapt ;) ) up in another. I really enjoyed experiencing this one! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Really nice. I had a mental picture as well.
  • thanks...i appreciate you guys taking the time to read and respond. i really like this one. moreso than, probably, any of the other ones i have put here. i don't know why.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • i know who this is about.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Trapped...

    such a lovely,as to what it seems,love poem.AS I sit here and listen to hendrix,all I can do is feel.
    And I myself-dyed my hair red tonight.Forget the black nailpolish:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • i know who this is about.

    no, you don't.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
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