me trying to be half as good as ed

A Surprise LeftA Surprise Left Posts: 743
edited October 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
i posted this earlier but it hasen't come up so i'll do it again ok here goes

the foundations of my life have split
the atom in two
how could they do it to you?
drop those tears
now get out
of your big dismal
and touch the sky

you've got to forget those tears
cause they only reach the ground
you've got to touch the sky

all around you there's faceless men
forgetten their creator
but you stopped me slipping
off the edge
my burden lifted
now i can touch the sky

you can't use the failings of others
as justfication
for your run in the mud
for he is the key
to escape your prison

drop those tears
forget those tears
The wind is blowing cold
Have we lost our way tonight?
Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

Feels like were all alone
Running further from what’s right
And there are no more heroes to follow

So what are we becoming?
Where did we go wrong?
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  • Very Edish.
    Given to Fly part 2.
    Is it dedicated to Ed. An Edication perhaps?
  • LOL

    not a dedication to Ed but I "borrowed" the use of the phrase faceless men from he and another lead singer who used that phrase. Is it obvious what the song is about?
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    My roots go ever deeper
    So my love can climb me
    To touch that sky that so
    Inspires every inch i grow

    I am growing up because of you.
    I won't shed a tear because i know you
    are my
    friend.


    Thanks for the poem. it does remind me of flying....and waves of wet lust for life.
  • thats cool is that short poem about unrequited love by any chance and going on regardless?
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by A Surprise Left
    thats cool is that short poem about unrequited love by any chance and going on regardless?

    yes it is.

    tears feel good on your face when the sun shines on it too hot.

    A Surprise Left, your poem brought that out. It was not there before i read what you wrote.
  • oh what can i say i'm truly gifted! LOL

    thats the first peice of creative writing i've done since a class i took last year. i should do it more often not because i'm some great writer but it feels really good to get things out. I won't go into detail about my song/poem but its basically about my parents splitting up when i was a little younger.
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
  • firefairyfirefairy Posts: 113
    Very Nice!!!!!:)
    “Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler
  • thanks so do i have a future writing lyrics for such talented artists such as Avril Lavigne and Britney Spears? LOL
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
  • firefairyfirefairy Posts: 113
    Originally posted by A Surprise Left
    thanks so do i have a future writing lyrics for such talented artists such as Avril Lavigne and Britney Spears? LOL
    Ok now you're scaring me. ;)
    “Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler
  • hehe

    well everyone needs to put food on the table right? LOL

    its got to be better then sk8ter boy!
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
  • firefairyfirefairy Posts: 113
    Originally posted by A Surprise Left
    hehe

    well everyone needs to put food on the table right? LOL

    its got to be better then sk8ter boy!
    ha ha I play that just to piss my son off sometimes. lol
    “Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler
  • that song is sure to set anyone off right? LOL

    now i must go and check out that ode to a frog i'm curious!
    The wind is blowing cold
    Have we lost our way tonight?
    Have we lost our hope to sorrow?

    Feels like were all alone
    Running further from what’s right
    And there are no more heroes to follow

    So what are we becoming?
    Where did we go wrong?
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