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City of Confusion

LikeAnOceanLikeAnOcean Posts: 7,718
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
the air turns
the tide of the times has come
and the heart churns
lies restless in the streetlight

and here we stay
in a city of chains
a city we created
under artificial rains

and here we stand
in the city of today
the hope of tomorrow
yet to say...
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  • elephantrunkelephantrunk Posts: 24
    Very Good. I loved every part of it.
    I only wanted to be somebody. So fucking bad I came unglued.
    Here we are now face to face and I'm fucking you.
  • hsewifhsewif Posts: 444
    I had no idea you have poetry in you....maybe its good that the AET has been taken away. ;)

    "the tide of the times has come".....I don't know if its what you intended but it reminds me of winter in Chicago. How the lake changes so drastically from season to season.
  • LikeAnOceanLikeAnOcean Posts: 7,718
    elephantrunk wrote:
    Very Good. I loved every part of it.
    Thanks!.. My second attempt at something.. I have another one somewhere here. My first. It was inspired by Cant keep and had a Ocean theme. It had a similar message.. I need to start documenting these. :/
  • LikeAnOceanLikeAnOcean Posts: 7,718
    hsewif wrote:
    I had no idea you have poetry in you....maybe its good that the AET has been taken away. ;)

    "the tide of the times has come".....I don't know if its what you intended but it reminds me of winter in Chicago. How the lake changes so drastically from season to season.
    lol, thanks. I turned 27 today, had no plans tonight, so i'm finishing off a bottle of wine and felt like writing for the second time in my life.. I still need to expand my vocabulary, but simplicity also works. :D
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    Happy Birthday LikeAnOcean.....I wanted to start a thread up in MT for you, but I don't 'know' you very well, so I didn't.......I guess this is as good a place to say it as any......(good poem - gonna go read it again) :)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • LikeAnOceanLikeAnOcean Posts: 7,718
    ISN wrote:
    Happy Birthday LikeAnOcean.....I wanted to start a thread up in MT for you, but I don't 'know' you very well, so I didn't.......I guess this is as good a place to say it as any......(good poem - gonna go read it again) :)

    Thanks!.. 5foot1 already started one for LBC1076 and I on the Porch, so all is good. :D ..our day of glory is almost up.
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    I like this one alot. Well written.
  • lovin kindlovin kind Posts: 268
    a wonderful piece of work
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
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