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warm day in October

justamjustam Posts: 21,410
edited June 2016 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
(I deleted this for my project)
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  • #X.#X. Posts: 142
    I have read over this poem several times, and keep coming back to it. It is really, really, good, each paragraph fits so well within itself. I can't explain what i mean, but it's well worth reading and keeping around. #X.
    "The Poet is a madman lost in adventure."
    -Paul Verlaine-

    "With me poetry has not been a purpose, but a passion."
    -Edgar Poe-
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Thanks #X. :)

    It's one of those things that was a feeling that came out rather than something I planned to write down.
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  • C3C3 Posts: 23
    wow... I reserve "wow"s for stuff I really like. I loved the examples you chose... it's so simple and so damn effective. I've read it about a dozen times already... great stuff.
    I am lost, I'm no guide
    but I'm by your side.
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    nice a.m.


    tis a warm october day here too. 86F. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    justam wrote:
    I'd like to drop a dream into water and
    watch it move like food coloring...
    see the spot as it dissolves,
    moves, until it colors the whole glass

    I'd like to feel an idea as it
    spreads like perfume through the air
    one of those plants in the dark
    it catches a nose or two
    but you can't see it yet

    I'd like to hear a sound that
    bounces off a building three blocks away
    to land at my window
    as clear as day

    beautiful poem
    I really love the final 4 lines, there is something so dreamy and appealing about them.
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Thanks! :)
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  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    way bad ass justly.
    nicely done.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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