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Four o'clock

justamjustam Posts: 21,410
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It was four o’clock
I looked at my watch
made the calculation for the time zone
and wondered how your day was going

did people make a fuss for you?
are you waking up with company?
did you feel loved?

I was having my hair cut
trying a change
if even a small one
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    contrite.....I mean concise.....heheheheh
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    ISN wrote:
    contrite.....I mean concise.....heheheheh
    I know you're teasing me, but
    actually, I was just wondering how his birthday went! :p
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  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    What a great poem...So different then anything I've read in awhile! Very refreshing
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    a poet wrote:
    What a great poem...So different then anything I've read in awhile! Very refreshing

    What a nice thing to say! :)
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I like it. And it is concise!
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    grooveamatic wrote:
    I like it. And it is concise!

    :D Yeah. That's me.
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  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    It's so cute and refreshing...
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    :) I like this very much too! You just took the sweet thoughts of a moment in time and laid them down. Very real and easy to relate to. Good job! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    :) I like this very much too! You just took the sweet thoughts of a moment in time and laid them down. Very real and easy to relate to. Good job! :)

    Thanks! :)
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    justam wrote:
    Thanks! :)

    You're most welcome, sweetie! :) I went to see Mark Knopfler last night and he played this tune and it reminded me of some people from my past. It was like all these ghosts were waiting in the dark to be remembered and they floated out of their hiding place to shine a light of remembrance on my brain. It's strange how a song, or a scent can trigger memories like that. I even had to fight a little choke of tears that welled up in my eyes... I only mention it because I felt like rambling :D and it kinda fits with the feeling of your poem as I was wondering how their lives were going last night and hoping they were all well. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    You're most welcome, sweetie! :) I went to see Mark Knopfler last night and he played this tune and it reminded me of some people from my past. It was like all these ghosts were waiting in the dark to be remembered and they floated out of their hiding place to shine a light of remembrance on my brain. It's strange how a song, or a scent can trigger memories like that. I even had to fight a little choke of tears that welled up in my eyes... I only mention it because I felt like rambling :D and it kinda fits with the feeling of your poem as I was wondering how their lives were going last night and hoping they were all well. :)

    Rambling is good. :D I like it when memories pop up like that.
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I like the part about "Calculating time zones".
    Makes me wonder what my favorite rock star is doing right now:)

    ;)


    Nice poem...very well done.....:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Ali wrote:
    I like the part about "Calculating time zones".
    Makes me wonder what my favorite rock star is doing right now:)

    ;)


    Nice poem...very well done.....:)

    thanks Ali :)
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    justam wrote:
    Rambling is good. :D I like it when memories pop up like that.

    I'm glad someone else thinks rambling is good!!! :D I think it's good to remember people that touched your life, and I think it's the highest compliment to an artist when his/her work can affect people like that. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    a poet wrote:
    What a great poem...So different then anything I've read in awhile! Very refreshing

    I would have to agree! Great poem :)
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
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