Cemetery gifts

justam
justam Posts: 21,415
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
she knew it didn’t matter
that in this mountain of flowers, hers would be lost
but she came anyway

she had loved the stranger
and she was true to herself

she saw the brunette with the glasses
she saw the chunky blonde with the full lips
there was even a very tall redhead elbowing her way to the front
but the quiet girl left her posy anyway and then went home the long way
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  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    So easily visualized, justam. I like it! :)

    "So, when the day comes to settle down,
    Who's to blame if you're not around?
    You took the long way home
    You took the long way home..........." :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • meme
    meme Posts: 4,695
    Oh, this is beautiful.
    I love your work justam, how you make poetry out of daily, common feelings and images.
    ... and the will to show I will always be better than before.
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    So easily visualized, justam. I like it! :)

    "So, when the day comes to settle down,
    Who's to blame if you're not around?
    You took the long way home
    You took the long way home..........." :)

    You heard that too, eh? :D

    I left that in there, but I was hoping it wouldn't pop out at anyone! ;)
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    meme wrote:
    Oh, this is beautiful.
    I love your work justam, how you make poetry out of daily, common feelings and images.

    Thank you. :)
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  • olderman
    olderman Posts: 1,765
    somesuch great stuff :D
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    olderman wrote:
    somesuch great stuff :D

    I like that smile of yours! :D
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  • twin1
    twin1 Posts: 902
    I really like this Justam - good one! It was as if we were all there with her... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • reachdown12
    reachdown12 Posts: 693
    "she had loved the stranger
    and she was true to herself"

    I love that portion, and most definitely the rest of the poem. Gorgeous how you make the imagery so clear. Love your writing dearly. So very nice. :)
    "Everyone wants to be the sun that lights up your life, but I'd rather be your moon so I can shine on you during your darkest hour when your sun's not around."

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