that first night

justam

I remember it
years ago
I was half dead
the previous night could have been my last
(but it wasn’t)

and there I was
disconnected
in a sea by myself
and I saw you
drowning alone too
searching out for something to hold onto

no one seemed to notice
but you were the only colored creature in the room to me
everything else was gray and empty
except you

I saw you there with your heart wide open
you seemed to be wondering why no one could see it
but I felt you
I wanted to save you
so I tried to pull you up
and you seemed happier
and that saved me

do you remember?

jboelhow

Just a note to say I like them poem. Reminded me of college parties. When you feel alone in a group of people, then you make that eye contact with someone, and you can tell they feel the same.

trinityeliza

great flow to that piece. i truly enjoyed it & you painted images in my head and they played out a story brilliantly. keep sharing the talent... Man, how I love the raw talent in here!!!
Thanx :-)

justam

jboelhow wrote:

Just a note to say I like them poem. Reminded me of college parties. When you feel alone in a group of people, then you make that eye contact with someone, and you can tell they feel the same.

Yeah, just like that. I'm glad you liked it.