My Friday Night Or A Kindled Love Affair

orig_bise2postorig_bise2post Posts: 193
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I heard it was a celebration of the full moon
but had no idea what to expect.
As Jill and I walked across the field
we heard the rhythmic beats of a drum circle.
I could tell she was frightened
by the way she clutched my hand.
Eventually we saw the dancing flames
through the sparse foliage.
When we arrived, we witnessed
a gypsy ballet of fire, and music, and passion.
Great gorgeous globes of fire fifteen foot tall
spewed from mouths of uncivilized night-dwellers
as others danced with a purpose
that seemed to transcend spirituality itself.
Two, three, four, five people at a time
twirled fire around their heads
in intigrate patterns that dazzled hearts,
bewildered brains, and left mouths speechless.
It was an intensely beatiful display
of barbaric nature at it's crudest.
"Nobody is ever promised tomorrow. Increase the peace."
~Juan Azize
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  • This is quite an interesting piece of descriptive writing.
  • AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
    Jill tumbled down the hill
    Because she was afraid of Jack.
    I mean really who makes up childrens (ran)
    nursery ryhmes anyway?

    Shall we dance?
  • thanks finsburry

    and amaterasu, not quite sure how to respond.... so i'll just say yes.
    "Nobody is ever promised tomorrow. Increase the peace."
    ~Juan Azize
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    barbaric nature at it's finest

    it's a wonderful poem.....but I have a problem with the adjective finest......barbaric nature at its crudest perhaps?
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Originally posted by ISN
    it's a wonderful poem.....but I have a problem with the adjective finest......barbaric nature at its crudest perhaps?
    You know, you are entirely right... i didn't even think about that. because the previous line tells the reader of the beauty we saw in the cudeness. thank you ISN.
    "Nobody is ever promised tomorrow. Increase the peace."
    ~Juan Azize
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    crudity.....in nature is not ugly.....crudity in nature is what makes it beautiful.....humans are crudely formed......barbaric is a word Hopkins used.....about nature.....well, hay stacks.....and it includes the word barb.......barbs are sore.....heheheehehe
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    the first irises are growing....and it's not even spring.....there's a beautiful deep purple one growing at the front of my block.....I was tempted to pluck it and put it in a vase......but I decided to leave it be.....with it's four long tongues.....buffeted in the wind.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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