like hell on earth

thebettermanthebetterman Posts: 657
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
glass flies through the air
carried by the sound of rubber
burning like hell on earth
its over, its done

a slow decline
steady and true
ravaged his heart
and pillaged his soul

with nothing to look to
no reason to stop
a pocket full of pills
and a bottle of booze

the engine purred softly
the pedal depressed like him
all the way to the floor
and away we go

on the highway it started
his stomach a chemistry equation
blurring him as the miles added
numbing him to bare existance

death was not a source of fear
instead a welcome friend
shown by the smile on his face
as he rode off into the sun
-one thing to remember, always have a good time, all the time
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    strangely, I liked this.....it's tidy....it's compact......it's how I'd feel if I weren't so resilient.....I just felt numb all day, so I can connect a bit with the poem
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    It was well written but depressing. At least he was too messed up to worry about what he was doing.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Sometimes death is a welcome when youre old.
    AS for me...I'm too young to die.:)

    Nice provoking thought patterns...
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • I like it, I am a bit confused on the first few lines though.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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