A christmas present for my girlfriend
johnnyd900
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Ok, since i value all of (well almost all of) your opinions here i figured i'd come ask you guys this.
For a christmas gift for my girlfriend, i bought a really nice picture frame, and i am making a border of pictures of us taken over the last few years, and im going to put the border around a poem i wrote for her. And i can't decide which poem to use. One is more short and sweet, and the other is a little longer...well you'll see. Any input is greatly appreciated. (oh yeah, and both of these are still working versions, so any advice would also be great) thanks again
You
A look
A smile
A stare
A word
A touch
An embrace
A kiss
A day
A week
A month
A year
Forever
And still each day with you
Only becomes better.
or
Whispers In My Heart
It all started out, as a whisper in my heart.
It said, "Hey, she's cute"
I think it knew from the start.
As time wore on,
We got to know each other more.
The whisper grew louder,
Everything about you I grew to adore.
The glow of you smile
Could brighten the room.
If a day started wrong,
Seeing you would lighten the gloom.
Now the whisper had turned itself into a voice.
In falling for you there was no other choice.
Now fast forward two years,
And always the love is still there.
It fills my heart all the time,
For you I still infinitely care.
You are still perfect,
Just like you were in the start.
But now there's no whisper
No voice in my heart.
Now my whole being, just wants to explode and shout.
I love you Traci, I love you no doubt.
For a christmas gift for my girlfriend, i bought a really nice picture frame, and i am making a border of pictures of us taken over the last few years, and im going to put the border around a poem i wrote for her. And i can't decide which poem to use. One is more short and sweet, and the other is a little longer...well you'll see. Any input is greatly appreciated. (oh yeah, and both of these are still working versions, so any advice would also be great) thanks again
You
A look
A smile
A stare
A word
A touch
An embrace
A kiss
A day
A week
A month
A year
Forever
And still each day with you
Only becomes better.
or
Whispers In My Heart
It all started out, as a whisper in my heart.
It said, "Hey, she's cute"
I think it knew from the start.
As time wore on,
We got to know each other more.
The whisper grew louder,
Everything about you I grew to adore.
The glow of you smile
Could brighten the room.
If a day started wrong,
Seeing you would lighten the gloom.
Now the whisper had turned itself into a voice.
In falling for you there was no other choice.
Now fast forward two years,
And always the love is still there.
It fills my heart all the time,
For you I still infinitely care.
You are still perfect,
Just like you were in the start.
But now there's no whisper
No voice in my heart.
Now my whole being, just wants to explode and shout.
I love you Traci, I love you no doubt.
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The poem, that is, not you personally. Well, I mean, I don't know you, but you seem sweet and, er, wait. Guy talk here: YEAH, MAN, YOU KICK ASS or something like that.
Whispers in My Heart has more history and personality, but it still sounds like a, please forgive me, sappy happy love poem, which is obviously what you're going for here. But I like the first better. I think she'd swoon either way, though. Maybe do one for Christmas and another for Valentine's Day??????
another excellent idea, but i dont think i have enough pictures for two borders...i'll have to have her roommate steal me some of hers so i can make copies
that being said - add a lovely poem and....*swoon*
both are remarkably tender and heartfelt poems, you can't really go wrong with either. i think the simplicity in the first poem is the way to go.
now if you are planning to give her two frames (either both at xmas or on separate holidays) might i suggest using the first poem for the frame containing multiple photos and then a single photo with the second poem. that way in each case, neither the photos or the poetry is competing with each other if you get what i mean. the juxtaposition of the fewer words with the many images and then the single image with the many words kind of balances it all out and compliments one another.
whatever you decide to do, i think santa is going to be VERY good to you this year.
Dibs on Genevieve!
ooh la la.
Dude, that comes with the poem.