a really quick poem i just wrote

pearlzepfan

I'm thinking of expanding it though.
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My mind has lost all credibility
That I've ever known
Open up your suitecase cause
I can't see what's not shown
My heads been filled with emptiness
But as they say more is less
So I guess that you can say
That I've got it all

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I'm not sure if that's how you spell shown (is it shown or shone?)

trappedinmyradio

pearlzepfan wrote:

But as they say more is less
So I guess that you can say
That I've got it all

it is "shown"

i think that you should expand more on the above selection - that feel - that style.