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El_KabongEl_Kabong Posts: 4,141
not to be read too much into, i guess, nothing currently felt

when i was lost at sea there you were
to throw me the life raft
only to pull me further out and cut the line
and laugh as you ride on by
lost, alone and afraid
afraid and sinking fast
but you never did care
was i ever really there inside your heart, baby?

and i can see it in your eyes
i can hear it in the lies you tell me every night, baby
and i know what you want
something that's not me
something i could never be
something i could never be

alone just as i began
surrounded by the nothingness i am
and you hold out your hand
only to laugh as you let go and i fall back down
wishing for the rocks to break me
but they never do
wishing for the water to drown me
just like you

and i can feel it deep inside
i can feel it when you hold me tight, baby
and i know what i am
and apparently so do you
something that should never be
something that should never be

just waiting for the final breath to escape me
so it can finally be done
just waiting for it to take me
i guess in the end you won
just don't tell me that you cared
don't tell me i didn't understand
just leave it as it is
like you said it's better this way

and i can hear it in the skies
i can smell it in the air
but what would you even care?
i see the sun setting
over me
and now it's gone
and all i can do is remember
but i don't know which hurts more

i guess now you're happy
to be free of me
i only held you down
at least that's what you're telling me
was i anything more than a piece of your collection?
something to show around
something when you get tired of, you just drop on the ground

and i can feel it deep inside
i can read it in your lines
i know you hate me
and i can't say i blame you
i feel the exact same way
my only wish is my pockets were lined with stones
to make it all the easier
but in the end whatever is?
it's what we both wanted
apparently
standin above the crowd
he had a voice that was strong and loud and
i swallowed his facade cos i'm so
eager to identify with
someone above the crowd
someone who seemed to feel the same
someone prepared to lead the way
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  • AbuskedtiAbuskedti Posts: 1,917
    Followed by her signing "Send in the Clowns"

    that was good.
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    excellent

    and i've felt the same
    SUCKS
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    A single bed whilst in Toronto?

    Very nice Mr. Kabong!!!!!
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • El_KabongEl_Kabong Posts: 4,141
    even flow? wrote:
    A single bed whilst in Toronto?

    Very nice Mr. Kabong!!!!!

    nope and thanks :D
    I wish I had wrote that. I am nearly in the same situation if I don't sort myself out. I thought I was two nights ago, but now I have a chance, I felt I couldn't carry on without her that night, it's hard even though you know that she has been the one who you wish could hate and forget all those feelings, yet you don't want too, but do, well that's my little rant. I feel for you, this poem seems to fit perfectly to my situation

    "and i can see it in your eyes
    i can hear it in the lies you tell me every night, baby
    and i know what you want
    something that's not me
    something i could never be
    something i could never be"

    I've actually wrote some lines pretty much exactly the same as these in my poem. I have actually written the exact same line as "Something I Could Never be" in one of my poems before.

    "and i know what you want
    something that's not me
    something i could never be"

    I love this poem.

    thanks i was missing my guitars (2 states away :( ) and was thinking of sounds when those first 2 lines sprang into my head, then i wrote the rest of it off the top of my head, been having writers block for a while, haven't writen anything in months so it was nice to finally get something out

    thanks violet ray and abu, too

    :)
    standin above the crowd
    he had a voice that was strong and loud and
    i swallowed his facade cos i'm so
    eager to identify with
    someone above the crowd
    someone who seemed to feel the same
    someone prepared to lead the way
  • I'm just glad you no longer feel this way, my friend! :)

    No more single bed for yoooooouuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!! :D

    Glad you're sharing your poetry, El! That's sooopa! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • it definitely reads like a song - i really like this...unfortunately, i feel it...right now, yesterday, and probably tomorrow...
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • lovin kindlovin kind Posts: 268
    blessings are people
    i just wanted to say that you shouldnt ever hate yourself and neither should i hate myself because you know if it werent for this id still be a shy boy sittin in my room playing the same song over and over again

    and it seems like a good time to request this great band to perform live on television again and by the way the 94 snl is going to be played again in the next coming weeks

    tokyo or new guitar
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
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