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Death can come at any moment
It will not announce its arrival
May it happen in my sleep
Useless is our survival
Many people run
Many people hide
Death like cancer
Starts on the inside
Pesticides for my survival
Playing god with the crops
Mad cow and tainted pork
Acid rain drops
Inevitable as it is
You can't dwell on through life
Torture the brain
Live with the pain
Check out early
Leave someone surly
A nice sleep death will be
Spread the ashes below my favourite tree
So earth and I can unite as one
The same fucking way my life begun
It will not announce its arrival
May it happen in my sleep
Useless is our survival
Many people run
Many people hide
Death like cancer
Starts on the inside
Pesticides for my survival
Playing god with the crops
Mad cow and tainted pork
Acid rain drops
Inevitable as it is
You can't dwell on through life
Torture the brain
Live with the pain
Check out early
Leave someone surly
A nice sleep death will be
Spread the ashes below my favourite tree
So earth and I can unite as one
The same fucking way my life begun
You've changed your place in this world!
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Don't know which is more dangerous.
Hrm... idunno... making suggestions is fine. Rewriting someone's stuff... idunno. It's kind of like stealing.
Uhhhh, I wanted to be the K-Mart version.
WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
Walmart in the way they have to have an altered version to sell to the public. There is nothing wrong with the altered version of the poem. It really would have been Walmarted if the last line got changed. So it is safe to say it could be a K-Mart version too.:)
Well, if you're cool with it, I'm cool with it. So long as no one does it to me, and I won't do it to anyone.
Agreed from my part. I do know where you are coming from. I was once like that but I have changed a little. If they were making money off of my stuff, that would be a different situation. I like the fun in the poetry section. Alas I don't mind people tinkering or adding on to my poems and thoughts. It is like a little offering of inspiration/death to the readers.
ps, e.f. I just submitted your poem to poetry.com in my name. I'm gonna win $10,000, I'm gonna win $10,000, I'm gonna win $10,000, I'm gonna win $10,000, I'm gonna win $10,000, I'm gonna win $10,000.
Well, no, not really.
I would sooner steal the corn bits from a fat man's diarrhea barrel than steal bits from a poet's poem.
pss, C.M.R., I wouldn't do it to you unless you bought me dinner first
poetry.com sucks bung. they'll send everyone who submits something a little email saying "you're being published!!!" just to sell books. No matter how garbage it is.
*Tear in my eye. Now dripping down my cheek* But Radar was going to win with this? Wasn't he?
This kicks the shit out of 98% of the stuff that gets published in that book.
I mean, I gave up when the "Poem of the Year" award was given to something that went like:
I love God
God is Good
I love God
He made the trees
I love God
Hooray God!
not to diss Christians out there or anything but... idunno... that just doesn't cut the mustard for me as far as "poem of the year", ya know?
But unfortunately, ef, I don't think you would have won on poetry.com, if only b/c you weren't praising God and parents of 2nd graders would burn your house down if you let their children read it.
And I find not winning the poetry.com contest a high complement for a poet.
I have read some of the junk on there. I agree it is rubbish. Maybe I'll bump my "Religion" poem to the top for you to read?
Sounds good... I have a handful myself.