the last poem i'll write about you

coleencoleen Posts: 938
i wonder if you'll realize what we once held in our hands
would you ever have held it so carelessly
set fire to all those plans

if that day should ever come, don't come calling for that girl
she's as dead as dead can be
of this you can be sure

she had given everything she was upon her lover's wish
to find that she meant less than nothing
and yet even a bit less than this

in her final hours she gave you one thing more
a wish for a lifetime full of love
afterall thats what hearts are for
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  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    a man that cannot see what he is holding in his hands...is a man who is blinded by himself. For what lies closer than a pair of hands to a face...or the warmth from a touch or a lasting embrace.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    nailz - i'm speechless really.

    remember what i told you about the ocean? i think i've got an ocean in my eyes.

    thank you. :)
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    wow very nice coleen!! im speechless

    u inspired me with this
    your light's reflected now
  • bambi girlbambi girl Posts: 406
    wow....thats beautiful.
  • Holy shit! Those are my thoughts exactly. I literally could not have said it better myself. I feel that way about my soon-to be-ex-husband & my ex-boyfriend. Absolutely beautiful poem, Coleen.
    And Nailz, that was awesome too.
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    aww geez kids, i'm flattered.

    thanks obi, bambi and veddergirl. :)
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    I know what you mean...

    I don't think I'll be able to put another lady on a pedestal....for fear of the pain it causes when she comes crashing down..
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • rio99rio99 Posts: 1
    I like it very much....and know what you mean...
    Ich möchte für immer empfinden...
    Mit dir geboren worden zu sein
    Aus der Unendlichkeit des Seins
    In eine Welt der Vergeistigung des Staubes
    Mit dir gewachsen zu sein
    Aus der Unschuld der kindlichen Neugierde
    In die Tiefe des menschlichen Strebens
  • Originally posted by coleen
    i wonder if you'll realize what we once held in our hands
    would you ever have held it so carelessly
    set fire to all those plans

    if that day should ever come, don't come calling for that girl
    she's as dead as dead can be
    of this you can be sure

    she had given everything she was upon her lover's wish
    to find that she meant less than nothing
    and yet even a bit less than this

    in her final hours she gave you one thing more
    a wish for a lifetime full of love
    afterall thats what hearts are for



    omg this is really amazing, could be a wonderful song...really


    keep writing.....
    i miss you already...


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