just a poem ... tell me what ya think ...
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Synthetic joy, or suicide
to quell a broken heart,
to dull the pain and anguish,
of a world that's torn apart,
No prize for second best,
the motto of the times,
success has become a virtue,
whilst failure is a crime.
Few try looking deeper,
into those dismissed as thugs,
to comprehend their agony,
to ask why they turned to drugs.
Society's unforgiving,
towards those who don't fit in,
not bright ...... not white or beautiful,
non conformity's a sin,
Instead of reaching out to those
who fortune failed to grace,
our arms we use to push them,
their troubles we fail to face.
Examining our language,
I discovered a mistake,
a word that made no sense,
a code I failed to break,
when this workd is split in two,
It's ironic what you find,
that the contradiction is,
the race named "human ..... kind."
to quell a broken heart,
to dull the pain and anguish,
of a world that's torn apart,
No prize for second best,
the motto of the times,
success has become a virtue,
whilst failure is a crime.
Few try looking deeper,
into those dismissed as thugs,
to comprehend their agony,
to ask why they turned to drugs.
Society's unforgiving,
towards those who don't fit in,
not bright ...... not white or beautiful,
non conformity's a sin,
Instead of reaching out to those
who fortune failed to grace,
our arms we use to push them,
their troubles we fail to face.
Examining our language,
I discovered a mistake,
a word that made no sense,
a code I failed to break,
when this workd is split in two,
It's ironic what you find,
that the contradiction is,
the race named "human ..... kind."
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Killer stuff.
You know, I have to say that this board has attracted some damn fine and creative people. I'm glad to be here.
LOL even if I don't fit in.
seriously, keep posting.
fun too
keeps you from smoking
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naughty
I know that there's like 80 posts or some crazy crap but there's only like 15 pieces in there altogether. You just have to muck your way through it.
Thanks man. I'll talk to you soon. Let us know when you post a new one!
seta
i think it's great writing well ya know if music
put to that than the whole thing would change
somehow , i think it reminds me of stuff that flies
out of me but yours sounds smarter than mine
so i have a question for some writers
what is the mindset going into a chorus for you
is it the music that creates it for ya or do you write
it first or am i just rambling