A little poem i wrote

nocode198nocode198 Posts: 125
edited October 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Tap drips and waterfalls


Unfortunately this is all you have
Tap drips and waterfalls, is heaven in your land

Screens showcase a foreign world
Photos of broken lives, on newspaper stands

Released into a life
Without a choice or even a say
Dreams be little because it’s too late
The final word has already been said

We are born together
But Separated
Like cold wind blowing sand

At home
We watch as a drunken brawl arises
People killing themselves
Living to support one charity
Their own

Here we witness our world crumble
Be Destroyed and ruined
Disunited and divided
To support only one charity
Your own!


Feedback would be appreciated, good or bad.
'Fox hunting is barbaric, the people who do it are a bunch of snobby tories with stupid posh accents. Oh damn, i didn't say that - damn, what a giveaway...'
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  • BinFrogBinFrog Posts: 7,309
    Not too shabby...nice imagery!
    Bright eyed kid: "Wow Typo Man, you're the best!"
    Typo Man: "Thanks kidz, but remembir, stay in skool!"
  • Yeah i quite liked that. Not bad at all. I also just thought i'd use this time to say how much i like this poetry section on the board. I used to hate poetry but i'm getting into now and i think it's cool how people can post their poems and work on here. I may even write a poem myself to put on here sometime but i'm not making any promises! I find poems really difficult to write.
    I don't have to sell my soul, he's already in me

    If you've lost your faith in love and music the end won't be long
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    "Released into a life
    Without a choice or even a say
    Dreams be little because it’s too late
    The final word has already been said"


    never underestimate the power of dreams
    it is the only sane part of our day
    and our slumber and a
    lover come thus
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