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bambi girl
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and as i sit here
and question myself
i wipe my eyes dry
and shake my head...
how can i let someone...
make me feel...
like this?
and all those promises
i made one day
i dont know if i
can keep anymore...
do you know how that feels?
to have your dreams
shatter inside your own mind?
those promises really meant something,
once...
how could i let them
fade away....
and do you know how it feels?
to let someone,
smash your dreams...
and i let you get inside...
inside of my head like this
i know tomorrow i'll feel better
doesnt help me tonight...
how could i let someone
play with my mind...
do you know how that feels?
and question myself
i wipe my eyes dry
and shake my head...
how can i let someone...
make me feel...
like this?
and all those promises
i made one day
i dont know if i
can keep anymore...
do you know how that feels?
to have your dreams
shatter inside your own mind?
those promises really meant something,
once...
how could i let them
fade away....
and do you know how it feels?
to let someone,
smash your dreams...
and i let you get inside...
inside of my head like this
i know tomorrow i'll feel better
doesnt help me tonight...
how could i let someone
play with my mind...
do you know how that feels?
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(((U)))
(((U))) too....whatever that means...???
I love these words... Breaks my heart to read them, because we do forget promises, or allow them to fade away (with the people we made them with...)
"Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
yes...why do we make promises? because...eventually, we might break them, and i feel a promise is sacred....to let it fade away....i dont know if that makes it our fault...or if it would just happen in time anyway...
sorry....
:(
it's me huggin YOU
cyberwise...
you know, a sentiment for the above lament
I wish I knew... your poem reminded me of a song by John Mayer "Split Screen Sadness" --- "All you need is love is a lie cause / we had love but we still said goodbye"
and a verse from a poem by me
"Is this where we start making promises
We won’t
We can’t keep
“I’ll die for you”
“I’ll love you forever”
Knowing these promises are impossible to keep"
OK, I guess I'm done quoting people...
I think promises are important to, I don't know why we don't keep them
"Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
ahh, agreed totally, and i love that section of your poem....have you posted it all on here?
and PN....thankums
As your poem has been bringing up stuff, think about all the promises we don't keep in ALL our relationships. Even the promises we make to ourselves.
Your poem is awsome in the way it has at least made me start to think, and that reveals the power of your words, nice job!!
I still don't have an answer... (smile)
"Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
I agree Nailz100!
"Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
okay....well you guys are more experts than me anyway
it just doesnt feel like a poem in my heart....but, if it looks like a poem, tastes like a poem, and smells like a poem...maybe it is...
Just be honest
i will always love drinkin' your brain juice, and thats a promis i mean to keep
http://www.myspace.com/alotalotbetweenus
one of the reasons I'll never marry....it sounds self-righteous, but I don't make promises.....my ex-partner promised me something once...I jus observed all these people breaking promises when I was younger, and decided not to make them.....promise is a word that won't pass my lips - I can guarantee it
promises are like the dried parched skins clinging to the trees in the late season.. i admire your stance and at the same time realize that it is without ... but i don't give a f***
As she slams the door in his drunken face
And now he stands outside
And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
And his tears fall and burn the garden green
he said he'd walk to the ends of the earth for me.....after a year....he wouldn't walk to the turn in the road
any promise I ever make will be kept.....I feel so strongly about this......
I saw people....passing round love like a tired rag....and I decided that I'd keep love.....special
and I've got a major crush right now....(I'm hoping it will turn into something else).......
seven: thanks
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call these words you wrote, as you please: poem, brain splurge, thoughts of the moment, catharsis ....
it's still pretty good writing
sorry you feel down,
and now that you've learnt:
((((you))))
and real
im sure lots can relate
those are the best types of poems..intense cogitations...... powerful musings
i feel like painting, so seven, i'll pm you.....RIGHT NOW so when you read this, make sure you've checked your pms....and replied okay. good.
sorry bambi....gotta say this....trust is a thing I proclaim to be devoid of......but, seriously, I'm the most trusting person in the wrold....I nivvir learn.....I expect people to be open and sincere.....every time.....I get kicked in the face.....so many times.....and I still love people......even though I feel separate......I tell myself I don't trust anyone....and tell everyone that too.....but really, I'm so naïve......I'm a good mother.....I relate to children well.......I'm as honest as the day is long.....and don't understand the nuances of duplicity.....I'm so fukked.....ehhehehehheehehe.....thank God
i think, we're all like you....we want to believe the best in people dont we...and you sound like a lovely person, you really do. the sincere people are always the most honest, nicest people i meet....so, well...good luck to you i guess...in all you come across, and i hope noone ever hurts you again like that.