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all that you can be

danielheyesdanielheyes Posts: 362
edited July 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
another of my guitar songs but i want you all to tell me what you think of the words.......please......

i want you to come down
i want you to come home
i still love you dont you know
i want you to know

all that you can be,
all that you want from me

id love you to believe
in things not yet concieved
i love you dont you see
wont you please believe

in all that you can be
all that you want from me......

its just played strumming a simple 'c' then 'e' in a piano type one strum way!!!! the chorus has a 'g' in it too!!!!

let me know what you think anyone......
When I was born, the doctor came out to the waiting room and said to my father, I'm very sorry. We did everything we could. But he pulled through......
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  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    hmm.

    at first read I like it.

    I'm just trying to clear out in my head who this person is.. I don't know if it's the 'poet' in me or is it just some other weird obsession.
    who this is and who is he talking to.. :) you know. and then I could figure out HOW is he saying this stuff.

    haha, so if that could be cleared up by you in any way, yey! :)

    but I do like it, it appeals to me on some level.

    I'm sure if I'd hear it as a song I would fall in love with it. hehe.
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • danielheyesdanielheyes Posts: 362
    eMMI wrote:
    hmm.

    at first read I like it.

    I'm just trying to clear out in my head who this person is.. I don't know if it's the 'poet' in me or is it just some other weird obsession.
    who this is and who is he talking to.. :) you know. and then I could figure out HOW is he saying this stuff.

    haha, so if that could be cleared up by you in any way, yey! :)

    but I do like it, it appeals to me on some level.

    I'm sure if I'd hear it as a song I would fall in love with it. hehe.

    it just kinda came out you know,not really about anyone in particular.
    i just sit with pad and pen and the stuff just falls out!!!!

    i only have one song written with someone real in mind but i wouldnt post it until its pressed!!!!
    When I was born, the doctor came out to the waiting room and said to my father, I'm very sorry. We did everything we could. But he pulled through......
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    danielheyes wrote:
    it just kinda came out you know,not really about anyone in particular.
    i just sit with pad and pen and the stuff just falls out!!!!

    i only have one song written with someone real in mind but i wouldnt post it until its pressed!!!!

    yeah, I know what you mean. I don't write about anyone in particular either. except for the times when I write about myself. haha.

    but you know, when I write about someone I still do kinda "see" and "know" them. why are they acting the way they are and stuff.

    and I think the pen and pad thing is the way forward. first let it come to you and tweak it later (if need be). :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
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