this solstice (three years old)

windedsailorwindedsailor Posts: 98
Self. Man. Mind.
The courtesies of a carousel.
yellowish lights, the bright ones on the bridle
I can ride back to madness,
while I remember how.
a courtesy to myself,
perhaps.
i can hear the coyotes howl.
Perhaps…
I thought about nickels, or dimes
or horses ridden, by the hero
Of old…
I pay the vendor a dollar,
And watch the boy ride.
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Comments

  • self- criticism: alright. it's kind of alright, but not too good, too. if i had given it more time... it has promise. not too bad, really.
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    it's nice to see you writing, anyway... :)
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    its more than kinda alright.

    i agree with Pasta Nazi, good to see you writing.
  • thanks. now to find the guts to try another one. thanks for the encouragement.
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    do it.. write another phrase, poem .. do it
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
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