I Love You-My Song

maddrummer
maddrummer Posts: 93
edited March 2006 in Words and Music...Communication
hey ive made a song up, i was wondering if you lot could give me feedback on it's lyrics:

I love you, no matter what they say, 'cause nothing gets in the way of love.

This aint a game, love's never a game, all these things i say to you are true, i love you.

LIsten to me, this is the only way you're gunna hear what i have to say, loud and clear.

This aint a game, love's never a game, all these things i say to you are true, i love you.

wish on star! for you! get ignored by a star! because of you!

thinkin about it, our time is through, i think i still love you, but im not sure if i do!

this aint a game, loves never a game, what im about to say to you is true, our time is through.....
Fuck The System
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  • pickupyourwill
    pickupyourwill Posts: 3,135
    maddrummer wrote:
    hey ive made a song up, i was wondering if you lot could give me feedback on it's lyrics:

    I love you, no matter what they say, 'cause nothing gets in the way of love.

    This aint a game, love's never a game, all these things i say to you are true, i love you.

    LIsten to me, this is the only way you're gunna hear what i have to say, loud and clear.

    This aint a game, love's never a game, all these things i say to you are true, i love you.

    wish on star! for you! get ignored by a star! because of you!

    thinkin about it, our time is through, i think i still love you, but im not sure if i do!

    this aint a game, loves never a game, what im about to say to you is true, our time is through.....

    I think it sounds good--but that's just me. its simple and sweet and sad-- and if you put it to some good music it could be even better. keep on writing. wish on star! :)
  • wolfbear
    wolfbear Posts: 3,965
    I really like what is there so far, but I think there needs to be more. Of course, needs music to go with it. I think a few more lines and music and you've got something good. :)
    "I'd rather be with an animal." "Those that can be trusted can change their mind." "The in between is mine." "If I don't lose control, explore and not explode, a preternatural other plane with the power to maintain." "Yeh this is living." "Life is what you make it."
  • maddrummer
    maddrummer Posts: 93
    hey, thanks for the feedbak! i have music with it, but i need to teach it to some of my jamming mates, then get it onto the computer, and hopefully on here:D
    Fuck The System

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