Barkentine

TalonTedd
TalonTedd Toronto Posts: 835
in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
debonair whispers flow across the sheets
promising an ever after scribed in gold
propelling our jeweled bark under sail
bounded souls listing in an effervescent dream
you do as do I, Zona
together with an ever after scribed in gold



I remember when, yeah. I swore I knew everything, oh yeah.

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  • Jason78
    Jason78 Posts: 400
    Yes. This is what I'm talking about. "jeweled bark under sail"....that's f*&#ing beautiful!
  • TalonTedd
    TalonTedd Toronto Posts: 835
    You just compressed the air in our sails! In truth, Barkentine was inspired by "her"; your poem and the movie. They both revealed themselves on the 27th. My wife and I lay together on the pull-out with our children at the foot, sleeping. The next day I read "her' by you kind sir and thought to come up with something about our voyage through life. They, bejewel my vessel and I am so happy for them. My gratitude to you for commenting. :)
    I remember when, yeah. I swore I knew everything, oh yeah.
  • chadwick
    chadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    Jason78 said:

    Yes. This is what I'm talking about. "jeweled bark under sail"....that's f*&#ing beautiful!

    it sure is
    i finally read this poem of yours yesterday & this is a great line
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    TalonTedd said:

    debonair whispers flow across the sheets
    promising an ever after scribed in gold
    propelling our jeweled bark under sail
    bounded souls listing in an effervescent dream
    you do as do I, Zona
    together with an ever after scribed in gold



    awesome stuff
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    TalonTedd said:

    debonair whispers flow across the sheets
    promising an ever after scribed in gold
    propelling our jeweled bark under sail
    bounded souls listing in an effervescent dream
    you do as do I, Zona
    together with an ever after scribed in gold




    wow ! killer,awesome,beautiful,movie and history making stuff....I know I sound a little overbord but I really like this..

    Godfather.

  • TalonTedd
    TalonTedd Toronto Posts: 835
    Thank you all. I'm floored. especially because all of you are so very talented. I learn from you all! :\">
    I remember when, yeah. I swore I knew everything, oh yeah.

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