Wrote this about 20 odd years ago

LoveboatKman
LoveboatKman Australia Posts: 297
edited November 2013 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Never shared this, maybe with my wife but that's about all, always thought it should be a song but never could find it's musical fit.
Tell me what you think (i was about 20):

Locked in a world that were his own thoughts
He faced the mosaic that was his past, present, and future
Confronted with the possibility of hostility
He withdraws from the option of choice - it would pass
Horrified by the concept of autonomy he backs himself into a corner of his mind
Like the most trusting dog beaten by his lord master
Meek and feeble he'll not stand tall
Instead, he lives the routine that is his life
He exudes averageness and withdrawal
Personification of a doormat
It's sad to think we made him this sorrowful life.

Words by Kieren Olsen
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  • LoveboatKman
    LoveboatKman Australia Posts: 297
    NO thoughts? :|
  • PearlOfAGirl
    PearlOfAGirl Posts: 15,993
    LoveboatKman wrote:
    NO thoughts? :|
    I like it, and can definitely relate to it. Somehow it sounds like me...

    Wish you were here...
    ♥~RIP Dad
  • LoveboatKman
    LoveboatKman Australia Posts: 297
    PearlOfAGirl wrote:
    LoveboatKman wrote:
    NO thoughts? :|
    I like it, and can definitely relate to it. Somehow it sounds like me...

    I'm glad someone related to it. I'm never sure if i wrote it about myself but sometimes feel like i used to fit that mould. I've been a depression and anxiety sufferer for more than 10 years, but wrote this before that started. Wonder if it was always there. Thanks for your response, all the best.

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