Mind Your Manners tribute verse

freshymadfreshymad Posts: 54
Sorry to jump on here and post a one-off. I don't write much any more and I'm an amateur but the meter and message of this song inspired and lives with me and I wanted somehow to show my appreciation for this song and all Pearl Jam songs which have been a major influence on my small life. I can't wait for Lightning Bolt!

You know how you can hear a song and love it, and then hear it again and it's YOUR song? I'm reading "The Mind-Body Connection," and when I heard the line "Self realized and then I'm physically redeemed," oh my god, YES!

43 more days until I'm in Charlotte in the pit where I will let it all out! I wish I could hear all the songs that are mine now: All Night, Spin the Black Circle, Mind Your Manners, In My Tree, Inside Job, Nothing as It Seems, Unthought Known, All or None, Indifference, Can't Keep, Gone, PARACHUTES!!, Amongst the Waves, Force of Nature, and Hard to Imagine (the opening song in DC. I'll never forget feeling the sound of Stone's first lovely notes floating over the crowd ... Paint a picture using only grey ...)

Here's my Mind Your Manners tribute verse:

I Would

Somethin creeps me
Makes me lose my place
Forth is fortune
Backs my fate
If money makes a man
Then how the fuck did I?
Certain people have doubts
The masses vilify

Bits of cloud surround me
Air I can't perceive
Hold my breath to
Somehow preconceive
Will escapes it
My body free
So still it aches, there waiting
For me to breathe

Blow my wind to
Lift my spirit high
Split the mass
I'm dizzied by the guile
My crooked arms defeat it
His song is mine!
Laugh at the crux I cleaved
And then I see the sun!

Float down to be with
My love
Contemplate our being
Beneath the sun
Waves before spread out
And finish on the sand
Last sigh, I breathe deceit
And die to live again
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Comments

  • phenomenal writing awakens sentience!
    thank you

    I would write but
    Writing makes you hate me [=]* you
    I would cry but
    Crying makes me hate me too

    Bits of cloud surround me
    Air I can't perceive
    Hold my breath to
    Somehow preconceive
    Will escapes it
    My body free
    So still it aches, there waiting
    For me to breathe
  • phenomenal writing awakens sentience!
    thank you

    THANK YOU for your response and for reading my sentient words, ha!
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