Floating at night

justam

Like mist on a field, damp
shadows on a tree, that lamp
bright moon sky above
no shoes, a thought: love
obviously it's time to grow past a past
(it is, at last)
it's time to be free of childhood woes
(it is, Lord knows!)
but what's still coming?
it's time to dream again with heart drumming
(clean slate)
is it possible, at this date?
to erase it all and forget dull skull negative?!
I think it is, but I'm sensitive

swimming at night, a bit cliche, it's true
but the weather's getting warmer,
and when I feel like this, what else can we do?!

justam

I put this into another thread but this would look right in here too.

rollings

justam wrote:

Like mist on a field, damp
shadows on a tree, that lamp
bright moon sky above
no shoes, a thought: love
obviously it's time to grow past a past
(it is, at last)
it's time to be free of childhood woes
(it is, Lord knows!)
but what's still coming?
it's time to dream again with heart drumming
(clean slate)
is it possible, at this date?
to erase it all and forget dull skull negative?!
I think it is, but I'm sensitive

swimming at night, a bit cliche, it's true
but the weather's getting warmer,
and when I feel like this, what else can we do?!

I like this...ALOT

justam

Thanks!

I don't usually bother to try to rhyme anymore, but sometimes it's fun to do it.

rollings

justam wrote:

Thanks!

I don't usually bother to try to rhyme anymore, but sometimes it's fun to do it.

no, rhymings definitely not necessary
for songs & lyrics, its good to sometimes come close
this sounds like it would sound good spoken out loud