all about you

bowerymission
bowerymission Posts: 160
edited March 2012 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
all about you
Into the Wild Things
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  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    hello there...

    an interesting piece, I thank you for sharing....
  • bowerymission
    bowerymission Posts: 160
    hi there, thank you. the words were originally lined up in 4 columns.
    Into the Wild Things
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    side by side? is it meant to be read l1 l1 l1 l1; l2 l2 l2 l2... etc?
  • bowerymission
    bowerymission Posts: 160
    same line set up but 4 words/phrases per line-the post would not accept the line up, still isn't, but for example each word or phrase (giving/overly/god help you/cope would have 10 spaces between them:

    traveling/ transparently/ sly/ slipping
    giving/ overly/ god help you/ cope



    at some point, the formatting capacity here, just condensed it...would not accept the spacing.
    Into the Wild Things
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    ah yes the board is a hard place to add visual space...
  • chadwick
    chadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    interesting writing
    i will be keeping an eye on your poetry
    i am not good with names and i will most likely have to write your name down on a scratch piece of paper
    something like a sticky note
    help me memorize your screen name a bit better
    that way i can make sure i do not miss your work you add here

    i confess i am extremely behind in keeping up with the lot of you creative writers out there
    i must be missing a great deal of quality poetry in doing so

    have you been writing long? i see promise in you
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • STAYSEA
    STAYSEA Posts: 3,814
    kindly add some flow erty?
    Like punctuations?

    If it's not a song I don't get it.
    Even though I aced all literature college classes.

    A pause? A break? a word in Bold.

    Poetry , these days, needs to scream! ;)
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  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    chadwick wrote:
    interesting writing
    i will be keeping an eye on your poetry
    i am not good with names and i will most likely have to write your name down on a scratch piece of paper
    something like a sticky note
    help me memorize your screen name a bit better
    that way i can make sure i do not miss your work you add here

    i confess i am extremely behind in keeping up with the lot of you creative writers out there
    i must be missing a great deal of quality poetry in doing so

    have you been writing long? i see promise in you


    I saw this poem the other day and too thought that it was great
  • chadwick
    chadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    STAYSEA wrote:
    kindly add some flow erty?
    Like punctuations?

    If it's not a song I don't get it.
    Even though I aced all literature college classes.

    A pause? A break? a word in Bold.

    Poetry , these days, needs to scream! ;)
    give it a go. show us what needs done.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • bowerymission
    bowerymission Posts: 160
    thanks, chadwick, i've been writing for quite some time. enjoying your writing and rollings too, though i don't post often, i do read often. thank you.

    i am, generally, quite mindful of punctuation, however, this poem actually is composed of 4 columns lined up (as I explained above).

    the format did not work when i pressed the button to post, it deleted spaces in between, which perhaps would have made more sense.

    i disagree that poetry has to scream... there are as many voices in poetry as there are voices for humans.
    Into the Wild Things
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    there's a trick to getting spacing to show up on the board... you have to use endless elipses, and color them white


    it's pretty much a pain in the butt, lol
  • STAYSEA
    STAYSEA Posts: 3,814
    Um, I understand.
    This happened to me.
    We never spoke again.
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