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Unpersuaded

rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
edited January 2012 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
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It's not forever that I want from you
It's not routine
or growing tired
It's not leading the same old worn way
most believe
that most should go

but to stay in this grace
and this spark and this
way
and this time
and at night or the day and
if we joke, cry, or spill
take, mind, or play
sway
all we can or what we might not say
this having what I can't even name
unspeakable unobservable

the essence to which you translate
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  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    Your writing is extraordinary...! Brilliant.
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    pepper wrote:
    Your writing is extraordinary...! Brilliant.

    smiley.gif

    Thank you.
  • Godfather.Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    your writing is wonderful are you taking some kind of classes for poetry ?

    Godfather.
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    Godfather. wrote:
    your writing is wonderful are you taking some kind of classes for poetry ?

    Godfather.

    haha ~ thank you

    I just saw this.

    No.
  • JonnyPistachioJonnyPistachio Posts: 10,219
    Rollings wrote:
    Godfather. wrote:
    your writing is wonderful are you taking some kind of classes for poetry ?

    Godfather.

    haha ~ thank you

    I just saw this.

    No.

    It was very good - maybe you should give classes for peotry!
    Pick up my debut novel here on amazon: Jonny Bails Floatin (in paperback) (also available on Kindle for $2.99)
  • Justin silvaJustin silva Posts: 5
    Just read it and feel like a took a class!!
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    very very good. :thumbup:
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • CheeksCheeks Posts: 151
    I rarely write about love or relationships because it's difficult to do without being cliche or flat out boring... however, you seem to do it with ease and originality. Loved it.
    I read it out loud and it sounds amazing--some gentle repetition and internal rhyme goes a long way.
    Works really well. Thanks for sharing!
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    :shock:

    wow, thanks
    cheeks, cate, justin
    and Mr. PIstachio
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