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bmwtech
bmwtech Posts: 33
edited July 2011 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Long time fan on and off member virgin post. I have a 35 min commute to work and this came to mine. I am very private anything I write I keep to myself so please be kind.

lines of need
lost and cloaked
bulging greed
rolled and smoked
light by dawn
join the race
borders drawn
far from grace
we're free to roam
as they please
safe at home
still they squeeze
scared to life
i step aside
freed by knife
free I died
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  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    bmwtech wrote:
    Long time fan on and off member virgin post. I have a 35 min commute to work and this came to mine. I am very private anything I write I keep to myself so please be kind.

    lines of need
    lost and cloaked
    bulging greed
    rolled and smoked
    light by dawn
    join the race
    borders drawn
    far from grace
    we're free to roam
    as they please
    safe at home
    still they squeeze
    scared to life
    i step aside
    freed by knife
    free I died

    Hey that's good!
  • bmwtech
    bmwtech Posts: 33
    Thanks, like I said I am very private and figured the only way to overcome would be jump right in.
  • Claireack
    Claireack Posts: 13,561
    Don't be shy, post again :D
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  • mikalina
    mikalina Posts: 7,206
    I understand about being private.... but the Poetry Section is the Heart of this forum !!!! :D

    If you write poetry - send it in....
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  • the wolf
    the wolf Posts: 7,027
    mikalina wrote:
    the Poetry Section is the Heart of this forum !!!! :D

    And sometimes the colon of the forum. ;)


    I like this piece, good job.
    Peace, Love.

    "To question your government is not unpatriotic --
    to not question your government is unpatriotic."
    -- Sen. Chuck Hagel
  • chadwick
    chadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    write often and tons of it
    that is if you enjoy doing so

    don't be afraid to fall short
    everyone does

    the poetry section here is a wonderful community
    it's home for many of us

    poetic verse is endless and filled with more doors than one can open in a lifetime
    like you said yourself, jump right in
    maybe it will consume you
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • mikalina
    mikalina Posts: 7,206
    the wolf wrote:
    mikalina wrote:
    the Poetry Section is the Heart of this forum !!!! :D

    And sometimes the colon of the forum. ;)


    I like this piece, good job.


    Steve..... :lol: Thats true too !!!!
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