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Full of... him.

pepperpepper Posts: 155
edited June 2011 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
The page is empty
I... I am full
Full of words
Raw and naked
For I am too scared to dress them
Too scared to make them less than
The ocean of poetry, HE
told me was messy
Scattered metaphors of who I could be
Yet, never free
from... his similes of what I'm like
and where I'll be.
For a second I believe him
My eyes, full of wandering desire
My lips, a wave of lust
Every touch of my index finger
Every stroke, seducing the curve of my chin, tells me
He could be right...
Or maybe, the page is empty, for me to see
that it was his idea of me
that was dirty.
Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
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  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    Awesome writing!
  • PilateOfTheStormPilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    I... I am full
    Full of words
    Raw and naked
    For I am too scared to dress them
    Too scared to make them less than
    The ocean of poetry


    this is wonderful Pepper.
    It's intense and vivid and great

    there's a poem by Carol Ann Duffy that I studied at school. It's called Anne Hathaway
    and in it, just like yours, she mixes technical terms like noun and verb in with her writing
    And it has this effect, this really poetic and beautiful effect. Gets me everytime.
    Just like your poem. It's brilliant
    bravo :clap:
  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    Dang Dang wrote:
    Awesome writing!

    Thank you 8-)
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    this is wonderful Pepper.
    It's intense and vivid and great

    there's a poem by Carol Ann Duffy that I studied at school. It's called Anne Hathaway
    and in it, just like yours, she mixes technical terms like noun and verb in with her writing
    And it has this effect, this really poetic and beautiful effect. Gets me everytime.
    Just like your poem. It's brilliant
    bravo

    WOW, what a generously kind response. I'm going to check out that poem. I have to admit I haven't read much Carol Ann Duffy.
    Thanks!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • zarocatzarocat Posts: 1,901
    Brilliant!
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  • LoulouLoulou Posts: 6,247
    Wow, this was an awesome poem! :o Thanks for posting.
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  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    Thanks so much!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • Godfather.Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    wow ! Pepper this is awesome !

    Godfather.
  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    Godfather. wrote:
    wow ! Pepper this is awesome !

    Godfather.

    Thank you Godfather!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Excellent. So many layers of meaning and association, and so deftly written.
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  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    tremors wrote:
    Excellent. So many layers of meaning and association, and so deftly written.

    WOW, thank you tremors!
    Means so much to get such a good response from so many talented and gifted writers!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
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