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  • I read your waves
    feel safe in the knowing
    I am not alone
    you are not alone
    we ride these waves
    because...
    ....
    because we have to...
    we are...who we are
    scathed and all...
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Thanks skyeriverwinter. Your words always touch me
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  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    She whispered to the whispers
    Forgave the devils in the night
    Hands clutching translated through her
    to easiness
    She stayed still
    Easy, her room flickered with the chimes
    Hanging over her door
    Hand in hand we walked the canals
    Running ahead she divided the fields
    Her child knew of god, knew of death, knew of life, knew love
    I once told her how the world always looked different
    How together with her, horizons stretched, colours flared
    She told me her world was soft, like this all the time
    She prayed alone
    She knew God
    She lived in God every day
    Her arrival a blessing
    The parting no curse
    Parting tore me back to childhood
    Only wanting our love to continue
    Desperately trying to claw back the times
    The words that flowed so easily from my tongue dried up
    But she never looked back
    She married
    She bore more children
    She always wanted all the children
    I hope I see her again
    The last time she spoke to me kindly
    The next time I don't know what I will say
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  • tremors wrote:

    And when I finally got my life back
    I took charge of its decline
    Believe me I tried to fight them at the time
    Tried to stop them putting it down my throat
    I guarantee you they have means
    To break your will, break your body, break you down
    There really is no escape
    But how come I'm the only one of them that knows
    Knows what this did to me, to my self
    The struggle
    The daily struggle
    And now they've got one
    That almost seems my friend
    I guess it must have slipped right through the net
    This rage at my annihilation
    By chemical, by force
    Still burns on
    One day I'll break something good
    And then they'll know.

    it hurts to read this...

    breaking something good feels real good
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    tremors wrote:

    And when I finally got my life back
    I took charge of its decline
    Believe me I tried to fight them at the time
    Tried to stop them putting it down my throat
    I guarantee you they have means
    To break your will, break your body, break you down
    There really is no escape
    But how come I'm the only one of them that knows
    Knows what this did to me, to my self
    The struggle
    The daily struggle
    And now they've got one
    That almost seems my friend
    I guess it must have slipped right through the net
    This rage at my annihilation
    By chemical, by force
    Still burns on
    One day I'll break something good
    And then they'll know.

    it hurts to read this...

    breaking something good feels real good


    There are some things I have lived through that if I was really able to find the words for, it would be too upsetting to both write and read. So I skate round it, and often take comfort in everyday language. I find if I can describe something horrible quite blankly, then it is usually a sign that it no longer haunts me so. Some of the situations though are so horrible that even referring to them can be painful. Tips of icebergs, tips of icebergs - there are a lot of them round these parts!
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  • tremors wrote:
    There are some things I have lived through that if I was really able to find the words for, it would be too upsetting to both write and read. So I skate round it, and often take comfort in everyday language. I find if I can describe something horrible quite blankly, then it is usually a sign that it no longer haunts me so. Some of the situations though are so horrible that even referring to them can be painful. Tips of icebergs, tips of icebergs - there are a lot of them round these parts!

    we're then left with our thoughts... and I'm finding it's not easy to kill thoughts tremors... at times drink or drugs help... as of late however I'm finding that that's been making it worse... i don't know what to do...i know there's prayer... still.. gettin fucked used to be easier
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    forgiveness.....
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  • tremors wrote:

    And when I finally got my life back
    I took charge of its decline
    Believe me I tried to fight them at the time
    Tried to stop them putting it down my throat
    I guarantee you they have means
    To break your will, break your body, break you down
    There really is no escape
    But how come I'm the only one of them that knows
    Knows what this did to me, to my self
    The struggle
    The daily struggle
    And now they've got one
    That almost seems my friend
    I guess it must have slipped right through the net
    This rage at my annihilation
    By chemical, by force
    Still burns on
    One day I'll break something good
    And then they'll know.

    it hurts to read this...

    breaking something good feels real good

    love that poem

    some of your work tremors, makes me feel as though you've been inside my head ... rummaged through my brain and sifted out my thoughts

    stunning work, this thread is beautiful
  • tremors wrote:
    The Monster

    I watched the Hulk last night
    And it upset me
    How I hurt the people around me
    How I scare the people around me
    They look at me
    And see the monster
    Even years later
    Through the furrowed brow
    They look inside and see the monster
    I look back and see the monster
    Who on earth can love the monster?

    At school we are looking at poems by Carol Ann Duffy and Simon Armitage.
    This one reminds me of some of their work, Love it

    I really like this poem, the style of it. Hope to see more like this from you, it's great
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited February 2011
    tremors wrote:
    W.M.E.

    You met someone who gets up
    When you put them to the ground
    You met someone who knew
    How to rise above the screech, smart and sting
    So you stung him again
    And again
    And again
    You met someone
    On another plane
    You know so little
    You don't know what you're doing
    You met someone better trained than you

    You're used to squashing violence
    But found it harder to squash peace
    You didn't like it when your wristbands
    Only brought you greater danger
    You believe in brute force
    You'll never understand where I've been
    I wasn't going to let you take me
    I can dig a lot deeper than you

    In the end you did what you know best
    You increased brutality
    Took it over the top
    You increased numbers
    You couldn't afford to lose
    You had to break me
    With all that you had
    You were frightened
    By things you didn't understand
    Not everything lies in the text books
    They teach in this land
    You got your victory
    You must have thought you all did a good job

    So how come when I saw you last week
    It was you that flinched?


    Insult to Injury

    So you talk
    You whisper
    You spread your preconception
    On the telegraph
    You gossip
    You break the law
    Me a crazy
    Not to be touched
    By society
    You cause me problems
    But by the force of what you did to me
    The force of my melted insides
    I will prevail
    And you will fail

    My revenge comes in stages
    Your sickness
    You spend in one go
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  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Volatile material
    Resevoir bubbling with a flashpoint
    Material stuffed down
    Triggered.
    By a word, a song, a symbol
    Meaning, coincidence, conflagration
    Lines up and flash
    Detonates
    I would say inside my skull
    That would be wrong
    Body quivering like a taught crossbow string
    and unleashed
    Driven
    By meaning fuelled by fear
    Swallowing signals whole
    21st Century stimulus
    Rolling up and accumulating into the ball
    Of manic energy
    Danger
    To myself
    To others?
    Give me open fields
    and I'll run myself down to safety
    Dig a fresh hole under the unseen hedgrow
    Burrow down moist earth ten feet and hide
    Miles from nowhere
    Drenched and panting
    To return to myself?
    Outrun my terror
    Scream to standstill
    Instead spinning
    Get in my way
    Urban sprawl
    Catastrophe
    Incarceration
    Violence
    Nobody but you can talk me down
    Friends scattered like tenpins
    Strangers terrified glances
    Whizz past like rain sliding across the speeding windshield
    Police
    Full stop
    Lock me up
    Chain me up
    Rabid monster
    What a waste
    Of all that energy
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  • pepperpepper Posts: 155
    I have tried to read this thread right through so many times and have to say that so many of the words, lines, verses here are so powerful and hold so much meaning for me that I keep getting stopped in my tracks to take them in.........but for as long as you keep writing them I will keep reading!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • tremors wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    W.M.E.

    You met someone who gets up
    When you put them to the ground
    You met someone who knew
    How to rise above the screech, smart and sting
    So you stung him again
    And again
    And again
    You met someone
    On another plane
    You know so little
    You don't know what you're doing
    You met someone better trained than you

    You're used to squashing violence
    But found it harder to squash peace
    You didn't like it when your wristbands
    Only brought you greater danger
    You believe in brute force
    You'll never understand where I've been
    I wasn't going to let you take me
    I can dig a lot deeper than you

    In the end you did what you know best
    You increased brutality
    Took it over the top
    You increased numbers
    You couldn't afford to lose
    You had to break me
    With all that you had
    You were frightened
    By things you didn't understand
    Not everything lies in the text books
    They teach in this land
    You got your victory
    You must have thought you all did a good job

    So how come when I saw you last week
    It was you that flinched?


    Insult to Injury

    So you talk
    You whisper
    You spread your preconception
    On the telegraph
    You gossip
    You break the law
    Me a crazy
    Not to be touched
    By society
    You cause me problems
    But by the force of what you did to me
    The force of my melted insides
    I will prevail
    And you will fail

    My revenge comes in stages
    Your sickness
    You spend in one go


    those two compliment each other so well, i love it.
    very very powerful and intense.

    favourite lines are:
    My revenge comes in stages
    Your sickness
    You spend in one go
    So how come when I saw you last week
    It was you that flinched?

    very powerful last lines
    are these inspired by true events tremors?
    seem so vivid, the anger seems raw
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    tremors wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    W.M.E.

    You met someone who gets up
    When you put them to the ground
    You met someone who knew
    How to rise above the screech, smart and sting
    So you stung him again
    And again
    And again
    You met someone
    On another plane
    You know so little
    You don't know what you're doing
    You met someone better trained than you

    You're used to squashing violence
    But found it harder to squash peace
    You didn't like it when your wristbands
    Only brought you greater danger
    You believe in brute force
    You'll never understand where I've been
    I wasn't going to let you take me
    I can dig a lot deeper than you

    In the end you did what you know best
    You increased brutality
    Took it over the top
    You increased numbers
    You couldn't afford to lose
    You had to break me
    With all that you had
    You were frightened
    By things you didn't understand
    Not everything lies in the text books
    They teach in this land
    You got your victory
    You must have thought you all did a good job

    So how come when I saw you last week
    It was you that flinched?


    Insult to Injury

    So you talk
    You whisper
    You spread your preconception
    On the telegraph
    You gossip
    You break the law
    Me a crazy
    Not to be touched
    By society
    You cause me problems
    But by the force of what you did to me
    The force of my melted insides
    I will prevail
    And you will fail

    My revenge comes in stages
    Your sickness
    You spend in one go


    those two compliment each other so well, i love it.
    very very powerful and intense.

    favourite lines are:
    My revenge comes in stages
    Your sickness
    You spend in one go
    So how come when I saw you last week
    It was you that flinched?

    very powerful last lines
    are these inspired by true events tremors?
    seem so vivid, the anger seems raw


    They are both my current perspective on past and now recent events, aimed at the same subject - the British police force
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  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    pepper wrote:
    I have tried to read this thread right through so many times and have to say that so many of the words, lines, verses here are so powerful and hold so much meaning for me that I keep getting stopped in my tracks to take them in.........but for as long as you keep writing them I will keep reading!

    Thanks very much pepper - if thanks is the right word. Thanks for reading and appreciating. With this kind of 'collection' I feel I have been writing from a different place from previously, and stuff comes out differently, and I don't enjoy reading them back myself so much as other things I have done here in the past. A lot of the material here though has arisen out of other collections I have written here in the past year - where I have thought the writing as stand alone kind of things is probably 'nicer' - these are a bit more raw to me. I don't think I would have wanted to write from these kind of places, nor been able to though, had I not written the earlier stuff - so is a strange one!
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  • tremors wrote:
    They are both my current perspective on past and now recent events, aimed at the same subject - the British police force


    i thought it was against some kind of authority figure

    beautiful writing
    love the intense anger, very raw emotion
    i felt it :)
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    edited March 2011
    very good
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  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    "You can have your keys back"
    Start next week
    Have your old life back
    Get in your car and find some open road
    Your Fixer single is sitting right there where you left it.....
    Get in and drive
    Say goodbye to that year
    And don't look back
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  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    All that you have lost
    is all that you have gained
    All that pain
    is the fire to rise above
    Blessed
    By turning suffering
    To hope
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