Moments of Clarity

FinsburyParkCarrots
FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited November 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Moments of clarity have no nuance
They're the Derek and Clive of the mind.
You wake and you see that the night made no sense
when the dawnlight begins to unwind.

Moments of clarity really aren't kind:
They're the splat on a colourful scheme.
You're munching, then somebody pulls back the blind
And you're eating a dogshit icecream.
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  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Moments of clarity have no nuance
    They're the Derek and Clive of the mind.
    You wake and you see that the night made no sense
    when the dawnlight begins to unwind.

    Moments of clarity really aren't kind:
    They're the splat on a colourful scheme.
    You're munching, then somebody pulls back the blind
    And you're eating a dogshit icecream.

    I find Clarity to be especially villianous
    after writing one's master.piece of shit
  • chadwick
    chadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    thank you fins
    i like seeing your work in here
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

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  • the wolf
    the wolf Posts: 7,027
    chadwick wrote:
    thank you fins
    i like seeing your work in here


    agreed. a welcome return indeed.
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    the wolf wrote:
    chadwick wrote:
    thank you fins
    i like seeing your work in here


    agreed. a welcome return indeed.

    Yes.
    Please don't let the miscellaneous negative people get to you!
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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    That's not the problem so much. It's when the negatives get positive that I get neutral. :lol:
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    Half Full wrote:
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Moments of clarity have no nuance
    They're the Derek and Clive of the mind.
    You wake and you see that the night made no sense
    when the dawnlight begins to unwind.

    Moments of clarity really aren't kind:
    They're the splat on a colourful scheme.
    You're munching, then somebody pulls back the blind
    And you're eating a dogshit icecream.

    I find Clarity to be especially villianous
    after writing one's master.piece of shit

    It doesn't take even a special moment of clarity,
    to understand what I'm saying here, Fins, I hope for sure!
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Only on this forum could a moment of clarity dissipate into a cacophony of "huh"? :lol:
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    edited March 2011
    moments of
    Post edited by rollings on
  • eyedclaar
    eyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    Half Full wrote:
    Dude,

    I believe the "miscellaneous negative" comment was directed at my comment. But I hope that you get that I was just saying "clarity sucks especially after one writes what one thinks is his or her masterpiece (but with clarity one may find that its really just a master"piece of shit"). See, its a play on words and in the context of your "dogshit ice cream".

    Of course you know what I mean.

    But just clarifying....

    Interesting. I thought that comment was directed at me and I didn't even remember saying anything... Paranoia much? You bet!
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  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    edited March 2011
    no negatives
    Post edited by rollings on
  • eyedclaar
    eyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    Half Full wrote:
    eyedclaar wrote:
    Half Full wrote:
    Dude,

    I believe the "miscellaneous negative" comment was directed at my comment. But I hope that you get that I was just saying "clarity sucks especially after one writes what one thinks is his or her masterpiece (but with clarity one may find that its really just a master"piece of shit"). See, its a play on words and in the context of your "dogshit ice cream".

    Of course you know what I mean.

    But just clarifying....

    Interesting. I thought that comment was directed at me and I didn't even remember saying anything... Paranoia much? You bet!

    You are paranoid about being called negative?
    Or
    Yes, pair annoys you much
    Or
    which "comment" are you referreing to....mine or the "miscellaneous negative" comment?

    Please Clarify
    Thank you

    I don't clarify... I claarify. 8-) And even then I don't do much of that because I like to keep people guessing.

    Mwahahahahahahaha
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  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    edited March 2011
    clarity
    Post edited by rollings on
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Oh, right. You people are weird. :?
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    It's different from your other works in the pacing. In other works it felt like very quick walking on a sidewalk. The sounds you use in this one feels more like everyday tempo walking on a paved path.
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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I walk a bit more slowly these days. ;)

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