you look fine

acrossssSsssshitttacrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
edited August 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
You look out of place here
You look as if no one’s found you yet

You look like you don’t have eyes
You don’t look blind

You look like you’ve left things behind
You look as if you wonder why

Few answers here, fewer questions yet
Don’t see you asking anyway
Don’t see you care
Don’t see you have anything at all to say
Wonder how you feel
Wonder if you feel
Wonder if red
Is still the colour of your heart
You look like you’re missing a part

You look like the angel in captivity
Tortured and bloody

You look alone and empty

But you also look fine to me
I can still see you
I don’t see through you
You look good
And I can see you looking at me

I’ve found you
And we shall one day be happy
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  • mikalinamikalina Posts: 7,206
    Thank you for sharing your poem... my favorite paragraph.

    You look alone and empty

    But you also look fine to me
    I can still see you
    I don't see through you
    you look good
    and I can see you looking at me

    I've found you
    and we shall one day be happy
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  • thank you so much Mika...your words always make me a lil happy : )

    and yeah halfway through the poem I just wanted to make things nice: )
  • the wolfthe wolf Posts: 7,027
    very nice.
    Peace, Love.


    "To question your government is not unpatriotic --
    to not question your government is unpatriotic."
    -- Sen. Chuck Hagel
  • yeah nice was what I was goin for : ) thanks Wolf
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    You've got me all meditative as usual AcrossOceans. Very good
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    Send my credentials to the house of detention

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  • once again.. bein able to make the tremors meditate is an honour...always..

    you know when I was young, I'd always wanted to name my first band, Tremor--- and the others were like "whatever"... of course, my reason was Tremor Christ, and the fuckers obviously couldn't see where I was comin from ... so I love that you're tremors: )
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    once again.. bein able to make the tremors meditate is an honour...always..

    you know when I was young, I'd always wanted to name my first band, Tremor--- and the others were like "whatever"... of course, my reason was Tremor Christ, and the fuckers obviously couldn't see where I was comin from ... so I love that you're tremors: )


    Tremor Christ is deeeeep, and tremors is a good word which I can relate to on many levels!

    You are someone who has been through a lot, seen a lot. It comes across the oceans in your every word.

    Screw those other guys!
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    beautiful
    creative
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • creative? coming from you, that means a lot. thanks
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