Garden Angel

eyedclaar
eyedclaar Posts: 6,980
edited April 2012 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Garden Angel

She is an absence
I imagine
All too vividly
Like acid eyes
Across boiling rock
Screaming the truth
Of this
Petrified condition

I was cold
Lifeless earth
Starving blind worms
She the shovel
Penetrating my silence
Overturning
And exposing this
Albino belly
To sun

In that light
I gave myself away
Surrendered
To long fingers
Warm breath
Water and seed
As resuscitation took hold
And she is oxygen
Keeping lungs
From total collapse
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  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    eyedclaar wrote:
    Garden Angel

    She is an absence
    I imagine
    All too vividly
    Like acid eyes
    Across boiling rock
    Screaming the truth
    Of this
    Petrified condition

    I was cold
    Lifeless earth
    Starving blind worms
    She the shovel
    Penetrating my silence
    Overturning
    And exposing this
    Albino belly
    To sun

    In that light
    I gave myself away
    Surrendered
    To long fingers
    Warm breath
    Water and seed
    As resuscitation took hold
    And she is oxygen
    Keeping lungs
    From total collapse

    Interesting!
  • eyedclaar
    eyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    DangDang wrote:
    eyedclaar wrote:
    Garden Angel

    She is an absence
    I imagine
    All too vividly
    Like acid eyes
    Across boiling rock
    Screaming the truth
    Of this
    Petrified condition

    I was cold
    Lifeless earth
    Starving blind worms
    She the shovel
    Penetrating my silence
    Overturning
    And exposing this
    Albino belly
    To sun

    In that light
    I gave myself away
    Surrendered
    To long fingers
    Warm breath
    Water and seed
    As resuscitation took hold
    And she is oxygen
    Keeping lungs
    From total collapse

    Interesting!

    Hot dog!
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    I like this one. It's not like your usual macho offering. ;)

    Besides, I like garden statues. The old fashioned ones add a touch of something to a garden.
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  • Claireack
    Claireack Posts: 13,561
    :thumbup:
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  • mysticweed
    mysticweed Posts: 3,710
    so many visuals
    so much action in every line
    had to read it three times
    fuck 'em if they can't take a joke

    "what a long, strange trip it's been"
  • eyedclaar
    eyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    justam wrote:
    I like this one. It's not like your usual macho offering. ;)

    Besides, I like garden statues. The old fashioned ones add a touch of something to a garden.

    Nothing says macho like poetry. :lol: Thanks, justam!
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    eyedclaar wrote:
    justam wrote:
    I like this one. It's not like your usual macho offering. ;)

    Besides, I like garden statues. The old fashioned ones add a touch of something to a garden.

    Nothing says macho like poetry. :lol: Thanks, justam!

    Anytime! :D
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  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    eyedclaar wrote:
    DangDang wrote:
    eyedclaar wrote:
    Garden Angel

    She is an absence
    I imagine
    All too vividly
    Like acid eyes
    Across boiling rock
    Screaming the truth
    Of this
    Petrified condition

    I was cold
    Lifeless earth
    Starving blind worms
    She the shovel
    Penetrating my silence
    Overturning
    And exposing this
    Albino belly
    To sun

    In that light
    I gave myself away
    Surrendered
    To long fingers
    Warm breath
    Water and seed
    As resuscitation took hold
    And she is oxygen
    Keeping lungs
    From total collapse

    Interesting!

    Hot dog!

    Yes, you're right, this poem IS one interesting hot dog.
  • DinghyDog
    DinghyDog Posts: 587
    edited October 2012
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    Post edited by DinghyDog on
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    guardian angel. Ha ha. Just got this. :shock:
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    If he'd put a space between the letters, it would have been more obvious. Gard-e-n. ;)

    It's all sound and notation sometimes. :D
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