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Some part

-Buru--Buru- Posts: 1,292
edited June 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I recently finished reworking this one, named "Some Part"


Some part has relinquished love

The self resembling highway birds
flying into windshields,
painting blood flowers on glass,
trickling crimson rivers of
feathered warmth.

The self akin to fragile creatures,
Nature marred in every breath.
Life sliced by painted glass,
broken, in a dying frame.

Some part has given up hope, yes.
The rest gives dreams to wings,
but has not lived yet,
as the bird rolls over and sleeps
on its plush red carpet.

And yet to die would be
a peace to end all wars…

In this scarlet bed
I lavish dreams upon,
the beginning of the end
cannot be traced.
I am just a dreamer, but you are just a dream...
If I knew where it was I would take you there.

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  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    I like this. It reminds me of "like suicide" by Soundgarden as well as some memories of my own. Thanks!
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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    i like it as well.
    nice.
    i've read two of yours today.
    i look forward to reading more from you.

    thank you.
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  • -Buru--Buru- Posts: 1,292
    eyedclaar wrote:
    I like this. It reminds me of "like suicide" by Soundgarden as well as some memories of my own. Thanks!


    thanks, the imagery was actually inspired by a bird that flew into my window-shield as I was driving.
    That bird was suicidal!

    Wonderful and frail creatures at the same time.
    I am just a dreamer, but you are just a dream...
    If I knew where it was I would take you there.

  • -Buru--Buru- Posts: 1,292
    chadwick wrote:
    i like it as well.
    nice.
    i've read two of yours today.
    i look forward to reading more from you.

    thank you.

    thanks for reading :)
    I am just a dreamer, but you are just a dream...
    If I knew where it was I would take you there.

  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!

    I'M SO GLAD I GET TO READ IT. I'M SO EXCITED ABOUT YOUR WRITING I CAN'T STOP WRITING IN UPPERCASE. I'M THAT EXCITED!!!!!

    Bring it on, BURU!
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  • -Buru--Buru- Posts: 1,292
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!

    I'M SO GLAD I GET TO READ IT. I'M SO EXCITED ABOUT YOUR WRITING I CAN'T STOP WRITING IN UPPERCASE. I'M THAT EXCITED!!!!!

    Bring it on, BURU!

    Thank you so much!!
    I am just a dreamer, but you are just a dream...
    If I knew where it was I would take you there.

  • PearlOfAGirlPearlOfAGirl Posts: 15,993
    Although sad, I've enjoyed reading this... :)

    Wish you were here...
    ♥~RIP Dad
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    -Buru- wrote:

    Some part has given up hope, yes.
    The rest gives dreams to wings,
    but has not lived yet, what hasn't lived? the "rest", the "wings", the bird?
    as the bird rolls over and sleeps
    on its plush red carpet.

    And yet to die would be
    a peace to end all wars…

    In this scarlet bed
    I lavish dreams upon,
    the beginning of the end
    cannot be traced.

    Geeze, Buru, I've forgotten you. Til I saw you and remembered, and then read this... I don't remember you being this good. I mean, you were always wonderful, but parts of this top tops....

    :) (pastanazi)
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