Seeing Things (short story)

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edited April 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Seeing Things

My father stood six and a half feet tall, weighed close to three hundred pounds, and like some kind of misshapen magician, he could vanish in a crowded room. He had the inherent ability to retreat inside his massive red beard and faded flannels, becoming something of a giant house plant or awkwardly placed statue. It may have been his well known reluctance to waste words, or just the fact his silent, towering figure made others uncomfortable, but rarely did anyone initiate a conversation with my dad. I also remember the pain visible in his eyes whenever he found himself in the proximity of people chatting about weather, sports, or the mundane occurrences in their everyday lives. He simply had no patience for small talk.
As a result, my dad had few acquaintances, but I remember those who visited his woodshop as they always respected his desire for silence. When my father did speak, usually with his shaggy hair and beard full of sweet smelling sawdust, people listened intently to his impossibly deep and measured voice. Typically though, few words were exchanged as customers picked up their moose, coyotes, badgers, and other lifelike animals all hand-carved from the golden Ponderosa surrounding Timberline, Idaho.
It was a mid-October Saturday morning, a week after my fifteenth birthday, when my father awoke me from a deep sleep. Although I had no idea at that moment, it was also the day I would truly begin to understand my dad. I remember peeking out at his giant, shadowed form from beneath a thick quilt my mother had sewn. It was still pitch black outside. Through blurry eyes, I noticed the clock on my nightstand.
“It’s four in the morning… what’s wrong? Is mom ok?”
As always, his reply was short and to the point. “She’s fine. We’re going huntin’. Get dressed. Leavin’ in ten minutes.”
Hunting? Ten minutes? What the…? Although an avid hunter himself, my father never brought me along. In fact, he always hunted alone. When I asked him about it, even when I begged, his terse response had always been the same, “When you’re ready, we’ll go.” I could already dot the “i” on a Pepsi can with every rifle we owned, but when I reminded him of that fact, he would just shake his head and walk off with an amused twinkle in his eye.
As an even younger boy, I clearly remember the bald owner of our small mountain town’s hunting store once saying to me as I purchased a tin of pellets for my air-rifle, “From what I hear, I ain’t never sold your dad a game tag he didn’t fill. Lotta guys ‘round here would like to know his secrets.” I simply nodded at the time, but as I walked out of the store, I felt the clerk’s eyes on my back. He expected something more than the two quarters I had tossed on the counter.
I realized later he wanted me to share some hidden piece of family knowledge, an overlooked tidbit of wisdom, or secret prime location, but there was nothing to say; I didn’t know anything about my father as a hunter. All I knew is that we ate every single animal he brought home. The remaining bones wound up in soups, fed to our blue heeler, or incorporated into his sculptures. My dad once carved a snarling jackrabbit the size of an antelope and attached a giant set of elk antlers to its head creating an impressive and intimidating jackalope. Mother was absolutely tickled when he sold his mythical creature to a grinning tourist for $25.
Still half asleep, I stumbled out of bed and rummaged through my dresser for long-johns and warm outer layer. I finished my hunting ensemble with a well-worn down coat, gloves, leather boots, and a heavy-duty sheepskin hat that looked more like a hornless Viking helmet. My father appeared back at the door dressed from head to toe in a pair of hooded camouflage coveralls. “You ready?”
I nodded and followed him out to our silver and oxidizing 1972 Chevy Blazer. A duffle bag, two day packs, and a large canteen sat in the bench style back seat. Concentrating on the effort it took to keep my eyes open, I failed to notice the empty gun racks installed over the passenger side windows. In fact, I barely remember passing the Timberline population sign less than a half-mile from our house, before I was slumped against the door and drifting off.
I recall a dream as vividly as anything else from that trip. Standing on a cliff, overlooking a lake nearly a hundred feet below, I could see my friends swimming below and beckoning me to join them. My heart wanted to make the insane plunge, but my brain kept posing intimidating questions and picturing tragic scenarios. Even in my sleep, I felt an ardent sense of self-doubt and disappointment. I knew I couldn’t jump; I was too scared. However, just as I was about to turn away from the cliff, my friends, and a chance to overcome the fear, some strong invisible hand shoved me square in the back and over the edge I went.
I jerked awake to find myself sitting in my dad’s Blazer with him nudging my shoulder. “Wake up,” he whispered. I mumbled some sort of apology and straightened myself in the bucket seat. The dark world I fell asleep in had been replaced by total whiteout. For a split-second, the last instant of my dream flooded back over me and I experienced a sense of vertigo, like we were falling through clouds. Instinctually, I grabbed the door handle for balance. My father looked into my eyes and raised a finger to his mouth. “Shhhhh.”
We were parked. Where, I had no idea, but the outside world had been swallowed in thick fog. Through the side window, I could make out snow-covered ground beneath the tires and could almost imagine the outline of pine trees some thirty feet from the Chevy’s front bumper. The fog and snow were an identical shade of white and trying to discern where one met the other was impossible. Almost lost in the ivory backdrop were large flakes of snow drifting slowly through the calm air, like thousands of feathered pillows had been turned inside out somewhere in the sky above.
“Where are w…,” I started to ask, but my father cut me off with a wave of his hand and pointed straight out the front windshield. My eyes followed his index finger and for a moment I saw nothing but the slow swirl of dense fog and snow. Then, suddenly, I could make out shapes moving in the mist; hazy silhouettes of dark creatures gradually taking form. I felt an overpowering urge to throw open the door and escape before the foreboding apparitions could fully manifest and overtake our position. Instead, I sat frozen, afraid to move or make a sound. More shadowy figures appeared, figures growing impossibly large, and then through the white veil, the silent wraiths began to materialize.
Almost paralyzed by the sudden transition from apprehension to fascination, I simply stared, mouth agape, as the elk herd marched into view, each animal bellowing great plumes of vapor. For a split second, I remember thinking the outside fog wasn’t really a fog at all, but instead, the breath of a hundred giant mammals held close to the earth by frozen mountain air. The elk, it seemed, could create their own mist in which to hide and move about cloaked in secrecy.
The majestic animals, already draped in their impressive tan and chocolate winter coats, never hesitated at the sight of our vehicle. We may as well have been a boulder in the path of a river. The herd, consisting of adult cows and their protected calves in tow, split in half and began to amble past our Blazer on both sides. Giant, dark eyes, rolling lazily in their sockets peered into the vehicle’s windows, but the elk weren’t at all concerned with the two humans sitting motionless inside. One particularly large cow swung her massive head too far to one side as she sauntered past and lightly tapped the passenger side window with the end of her muzzle. She snorted in surprise at the invisible barrier leaving a wet nose print on the glass just inches from my face.
It was at that moment I finally risked a glance towards my father. The situation was so surreal, part of me wondered if we were both witnessing the same scene; I needed confirmation that I wasn’t still dreaming. What I saw in his face and what became crystal clear to me in that instant would stick with me the rest of my life. There was a tear breaking free from the corner of the big man’s eye. I watched it roll over his cheek bone and disappear into his beard. He made no effort to hide it. In fact, he looked straight into my eyes and I instantly understood something very profound about my father.
He loved these forest animals more than anyone could imagine. The elk, the deer, the mountain lions and wolves, my father cherished them all. I realized his hunting secrets were wrapped in his respect and appreciation for living things. Through countless hours hunting, hiking, and quiet observation, he understood their patterns and behavior like nobody I would ever meet, something I would gradually learn as my father’s student over the course of the next ten years.
Seeing my dad shed an unabashed tear over an animal he could also kill and eat freed me from so many expectations about what it meant to be a man. His wasn’t an adversarial role with nature. He wasn’t out to prove something to himself, or conquer anything. My father hunted because our family needed food, but he never once lost perspective on what it meant to take a life. Like any natural predator, my father killed because he had to, not because he took any kind of pleasure in the act.
Later in life, I also realized his wood carving business wasn’t just a means to help support a family with financial issues, but rather, each carving a labor of love intended to enshrine the life force of a beautiful animal. Something about immortalizing his prey in tedious detail allowed him to be at peace with the lives he took.
“Are you sure you’re ready to hunt with me?” My father’s question didn’t catch me off-guard that October morning. In fact, I actually expected it.
“I am,” I said simply and beyond all shadow of doubt, he knew I understood.
“Good,” he said. “Next time we bring the rifles.”
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  • the wolfthe wolf Posts: 7,027
    I really like this Eyed. Thanks for posting.
    Peace, Love.


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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    The last sentence of the story made me smile. :)
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  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    justam wrote:
    The last sentence of the story made me smile. :)

    Thanks, Wolf! And justam, did you mean you are glad you didn't have to read about an actual hunt to end the story?
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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    understood.
    very well written.
    thank you.

    i started hunting and fishing with my dad before i could form a sentence.
    he'd have a shotgun or rifle in one hand and my hand in another.
    actually i held on to his index finger as we walked the forest.
    he taught me to respect all life.
    every animal we shot was eaten, like your family we needed the food.
    i got my first (single shot 20 gauge) shotgun at age 8 or 10 i think.
    it was amazing learning gun safety from my dad and (grandpa) his dad.

    when dad died a huge part of me died too.
    to this day i still cant fish.
    i haven't hunted in at least 15 years or more and haven't went fishing in like 8 years or so.

    dad was (my two brothers and i) our best friend.

    thanks again for the story, eyed.
    very nice.
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  • Is this autobiographical? If not, is there someone in your life you based this on?
    And is it a part of something larger to come, or just a (strong) stand-alone?
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  • ClaireackClaireack Posts: 13,561
  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    Is this autobiographical? If not, is there someone in your life you based this on?
    And is it a part of something larger to come, or just a (strong) stand-alone?


    It is a piece of fiction. However, my fiction is usually heavily influenced by actual events. The dad in this story is realy a composite character of the best sides of my actual grandfather, my step-dad, and myself. The elk in the snow/fog scene actually happened to me.
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  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    Claireack wrote:
    That was really beautiful.

    Thank you. My wife burst into tears while reading it. That's always a good sign.
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    eyedclaar wrote:
    justam wrote:
    The last sentence of the story made me smile. :)

    Thanks, Wolf! And justam, did you mean you are glad you didn't have to read about an actual hunt to end the story?

    No, I meant that I thought that was a really good way to give us insight into your father's personality. It represented a quiet type of humor to me.
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  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    justam wrote:
    eyedclaar wrote:
    justam wrote:
    The last sentence of the story made me smile. :)

    Thanks, Wolf! And justam, did you mean you are glad you didn't have to read about an actual hunt to end the story?

    No, I meant that I thought that was a really good way to give us insight into your father's personality. It represented a quiet type of humor to me.


    got'cha. Good, that is how it was intended. Thanks!
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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    yeah eyed i was thinking of this story a lot yesterday.
    it took me back many many years.
    it reminds me of my childhood.
    it's almost like we're brothers or something.
    very nice.
    thanks for sharing with us.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    chadwick wrote:
    yeah eyed i was thinking of this story a lot yesterday.
    it took me back many many years.
    it reminds me of my childhood.
    it's almost like we're brothers or something.
    very nice.
    thanks for sharing with us.

    I think we'd get along famously. We really could have raised some hell back in the day.
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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    eyedclaar wrote:
    chadwick wrote:
    yeah eyed i was thinking of this story a lot yesterday.
    it took me back many many years.
    it reminds me of my childhood.
    it's almost like we're brothers or something.
    very nice.
    thanks for sharing with us.

    I think we'd get along famously. We really could have raised some hell back in the day.

    unbelievable bullshit would have taken place im sure.
    like jumping off a garage and landing on top of a lawnmower... duh
    how about throwing charcoal briquettes, ears of corn, and dirt clods at each other from atop said garage?
    what about karate in the dark where sweet pickle kids books are used as throwing stars?
    did ya'll play fun games like this in the idaho mountains?
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    chadwick wrote:
    eyedclaar wrote:
    chadwick wrote:
    yeah eyed i was thinking of this story a lot yesterday.
    it took me back many many years.
    it reminds me of my childhood.
    it's almost like we're brothers or something.
    very nice.
    thanks for sharing with us.

    I think we'd get along famously. We really could have raised some hell back in the day.

    unbelievable bullshit would have taken place im sure.
    like jumping off a garage and landing on top of a lawnmower... duh
    how about throwing charcoal briquettes, ears of corn, and dirt clods at each other from atop said garage?
    what about karate in the dark where sweet pickle kids books are used as throwing stars?
    did ya'll play fun games like this in the idaho mountains?

    Sounds about right. bb gun fights, bottle rocket fights, fight fights... I'm not sure how anyone survived, or at the very least, didn't lose an eye.
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