the red thing

acrossssSsssshitttacrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
edited November 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
it's what happened

…and no one knows it
but me

on my way home
I saw on the road
a red thing
I feel I stepped on it
maybe that's why
…I'm hurting

and when I look inside
I see painted your eyes
looking at me
and tonight
…I can't sleep

it's the red thing
and a face so familiar to me

is this love again?
I do not think
that I can take it, I just don't think

... that I can take it

I'd carried you home
and we’d entered the other side
of my door
then you weren't there
…what the fuck's going on ?
this is not me
and this
is not home

I asked,

“why can't it be
as if You painted me !

why do I think
there's something wrong with me?”

I'd carried not just you
I’d carried your things too
and as you kept looking at me
you meant everything
to me
…I wished you well
but I also made a wish
for me

the taxi !
it took all my money
and the red thing too,
was no longer with me

…your face, your face
I have never before seen
such a face

you'd read what I had to say
I then carried you away
from Hell

but now I see
that maybe I left you there
that I never carried you at all

...that there was no taxi

and this red thing
...is all I've got with me
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  • I absolutely love the style of your writing. Just love it. Another great one!
  • and I love how intensely you appreciate: ) thanks
  • the wolfthe wolf Posts: 7,027
    "and this red thing
    ...is all I've got with me"


    wow. that's all I can say because I'm pretty sure I know exactly what you are feeling.
    Peace, Love.


    "To question your government is not unpatriotic --
    to not question your government is unpatriotic."
    -- Sen. Chuck Hagel
  • my head's all over the place Wolf... and thanks for knowing maybe what I'm feeling...
  • mikalinamikalina Posts: 7,206
    my head's all over the place Wolf... and thanks for knowing maybe what I'm feeling...


    Hello "across oceans" thank you for sharing, very intense. Your mind is overflowing.
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  • thank you mika... you always have very kind words to say: )
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    edited March 2011
    thats good
    Post edited by rollings on
  • Half Full wrote:
    holy kamoly batman

    hang on... stay right by my side pretty robin
  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    this is really something
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • chadwick wrote:
    this is really something

    it's just a red thing...fuck it... but Full Full dug it out from god knows where...

    thank you.. both
  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    chadwick wrote:
    this is really something

    it's just a red thing...fuck it... but Full Full dug it out from god knows where...

    thank you.. both
    i felt you having fun writing this one out
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • chadwick wrote:
    chadwick wrote:
    this is really something

    it's just a red thing...fuck it... but Full Full dug it out from god knows where...

    thank you.. both
    i felt you having fun writing this one out

    chad... one thing it wasn't ..was fun...

    readin it now more than 6 months later... that's ok...maybe even fun... but I'd never ... ever... wanna be where I was when i wrote this shittt.... there are lows that i love drownin in... but not this one
  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    maybe i should have said lots of emotion going on when writing this one
    seemed fun
    it was pumped up
    pumped up and fun get confusing
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • yeah... i hear you...

    it was quite the badass 3.45 am if you know what i mean

    i'll remember it
  • rollingsrollings Posts: 7,124
    edited March 2011
    or good
    Post edited by rollings on
  • Half Full wrote:
    chadwick wrote:
    maybe i should have said lots of emotion going on when writing this one
    seemed fun
    it was pumped up
    pumped up and fun get confusing

    they also get along

    funpump... pumpinfun... that feels nice : )
  • Invest in potatoes silly and smile you are going to be ok :)
  • Maybe you will play golf too :) cheer up please
  • canoegirl your cute words always cheer me up... thank you : )
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