I can hear you...

weedweed Posts: 475
edited March 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I can hear you
in the background
but this is the only
hill I know of
and my free plays
are about to run out
with no money
to spend on more
besides...
I've spent too much already
have I been there?
have I been shown?
maybe... maybe not
but its hard to tell
cause ya can't look around
when you travel with your head down
and looking up
causes me to look at someone else
which only guarantees me
to be locked in the bathroom crying
there are places
that I used to like
but now I hate them
and no way to get there
even if I liked them again
just for 5 minutes
and its not my fault
so go ahead
and call me stubborn
but you haven't seen
stubborn yet
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  • :lol:
  • weedweed Posts: 475
    Oh, I'm not finished

    edit later !
  • weed wrote:
    I can hear you
    in the background
    but this is the only
    hill I know of
    and my free plays
    are about to run out
    with no money
    to spend on more
    besides...
    I've spent too much already
    have I been there?
    have I been shown?
    maybe... maybe not
    but its hard to tell
    cause ya can't look around
    when you travel with your head down
    and looking up
    causes me to look at someone else
    which only guarantees me
    to be locked in the bathroom crying
    there are places
    that I used to like
    but now I hate them
    and no way to get there
    even if I liked them again
    just for 5 minutes
    and its not my fault
    so go ahead
    and call me stubborn
    but you haven't seen
    stubborn yet


    this is lovely...kind of sad in a way...the story you weave here touches on a sadness I know...
  • mikalinamikalina Posts: 7,206
    weed wrote:
    Oh, I'm not finished

    edit later !


    Very nice, I don't think you need to edit anything. Have a wonderful day. :D
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  • weedweed Posts: 475
    weed wrote:
    I can hear you


    this is lovely...kind of sad in a way...the story you weave here touches on a sadness I know...



    I made a list of things
    to cut out of my life
    #3 on the list was
    sadness
  • as i was readin this, i kept thinkin that I had to quote the line i just read because it hit home so hard, and I just realized that that goes for the whole bit... still I'll quote this:

    "but its hard to tell
    cause ya can't look around
    when you travel with your head down
    and looking up
    causes me to look at someone else
    which only guarantees me
    to be locked in the bathroom crying
    there are places
    that I used to like
    but now I hate them..."

    for this just rocks and I feel it so intensely...

    brilliant
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