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acrossssSsssshittt
acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
edited March 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
"Courtyard"

you in the morning tree
you were a flying bird
you sat for time that
stood still as the morning air

you watered my dry eyes
and you stayed just so high
then blew a breeze
and i knew that you'd soon fly

you in the morning tree
you were an angel
it's still so painful
to have seen you leave

for you seemed to me
to be in love with me
in a mourning tree
see the leaves mourn for me
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  • supersonicyears
    supersonicyears Posts: 2,619
    edited July 2010
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    Post edited by supersonicyears on
    "In the age of darkness
    want to be enlightened"
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    thanks for the private message Beach... not sure if you got mine, hence this post...

    whether "outbox" means the shit's sent or not ain't exactly clear:)

    anyway, yeah i am from the coastal city of Pakistan :) just wonderin also where you're from?
  • supersonicyears
    supersonicyears Posts: 2,619
    edited July 2010
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    Post edited by supersonicyears on
    "In the age of darkness
    want to be enlightened"
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    edited April 2010
    "Our Window"


    The falling rain
    I play along to it
    and for you
    I make something out of it

    If you look into the sky
    while the sun hides away
    you'll see yourself flying
    far far away... oh so far away
    and for once with the birds
    you'll laugh and you'll play

    and when you do
    and I know you will
    you will know
    I'm making nothing out of something

    and if you never look away from the sky
    you'll find holes up high
    in colourful shades of grey
    that you can make your own
    for after you die

    and if you happen to find
    teardrops on tree tips
    ... and a leaf or two
    against the big white
    you may even cry
    and for a moment
    hold your breath
    and forever
    ...close your eyes

    and if you love the one hidden inside
    you'll never again sleep
    not even after you die
    Post edited by acrossssSsssshittt on
  • mikalina
    mikalina Posts: 7,206
    Both of your poems are just beautiful. Thank you for sharing and lifting my spirits.
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  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    thank you Mika, it's taken me a while to write something which feels positive... I'm not sure how good the words are, but at least I feel a little better ... and I'm happy that you do too: )
  • the wolf
    the wolf Posts: 7,027
    Thank you for these, I too have been trying desperately to write something more positive,
    I'm not having much luck. Some ideas, but right now they just seem like words on paper.
    But these, these are really good.
    Thank you my friend.


    -steve
    Peace, Love.

    "To question your government is not unpatriotic --
    to not question your government is unpatriotic."
    -- Sen. Chuck Hagel
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    It's our window... not mine : ) thank you for reading


    Shehzad
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    acrossOceans wrote:
    "Courtyard"

    you in the morning tree
    you were a flying bird
    you sat for time that
    stood still as the morning air

    you watered my dry eyes
    and you stayed just so high
    then blew a breeze
    and i knew that you'd soon fly

    you in the morning tree
    you were an angel
    it's still so painful
    to have seen you leave

    for you seemed to me
    to be in love with me
    in a mourning tree
    see the leaves mourn for me

    awsome !

    Godfather.
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    acrossOceans wrote:
    "Our Window"


    The falling rain
    I play along to it
    and for you
    I make something out of it

    If you look into the sky
    while the sun hides away
    you'll see yourself flying
    far far away... oh so far away
    and for once with the birds
    you'll laugh and you'll play

    and when you do
    and I know you will
    you will know
    I'm making nothing out of something

    and if you never look away from the sky
    you'll find holes up high
    in colourful shades of grey
    that you can make your own
    for after you die

    and if you happen to find
    teardrops on tree tips
    ... and a leaf or two
    against the great white
    you may even cry
    and for a moment
    hold your breath
    and forever
    ...close your eyes

    and if you love the one hidden inside
    you'll never again sleep
    not even after you die

    as I have said before, you have incredible talent my friend.

    Godfather.
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    Godfather. wrote:
    acrossOceans wrote:
    "Our Window"


    The falling rain
    I play along to it
    and for you
    I make something out of it

    If you look into the sky
    while the sun hides away
    you'll see yourself flying
    far far away... oh so far away
    and for once with the birds
    you'll laugh and you'll play

    and when you do
    and I know you will
    you will know
    I'm making nothing out of something

    and if you never look away from the sky
    you'll find holes up high
    in colourful shades of grey
    that you can make your own
    for after you die

    and if you happen to find
    teardrops on tree tips
    ... and a leaf or two
    against the great white
    you may even cry
    and for a moment
    hold your breath
    and forever
    ...close your eyes

    and if you love the one hidden inside
    you'll never again sleep
    not even after you die

    as I have said before, you have incredible talent my friend.

    Godfather.



    but I'm not doing good my friend... i'm young but I miss God already.. thank you for your words. they mean so much to me... you take care
  • pepper
    pepper Posts: 155
    your poems are really beautiful. "Our Window" brought tears to my eyes, tears of happiness...how often does that happen!
    I'm sorry to read that your not doing so good, cos your poem made me feel really good! Thankyou.
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    thank you pepper... thank you so much...

    I just wanna say that if ever my writing does anythin nice for anyone here, it's not me... if I am a half decent person at all it's only because of those around me... my friends, including of course you individuals here, my family, Pearl Jam and God...here, the one thing we all have in common is Pearl Jam, and let us please keep them in our deepest thoughts and in our hearts always, because I alone am just not enough and they deserve so much more than just my prayers and my love...I'm positive all of you here already feel this but I just had to say this, and if all this sounds worn out, I'm sorry...

    I believe I've hurt one of the most beautiful persons I've ever known, and I think I'm paying for that right now as I ought to
  • Ms. Wes C.addle
    Ms. Wes C.addle Posts: 2,559
    acrossOceans wrote:
    "Our Window"


    The falling rain
    I play along to it
    and for you
    I make something out of it

    If you look into the sky
    while the sun hides away
    you'll see yourself flying
    far far away... oh so far away
    and for once with the birds
    you'll laugh and you'll play

    and when you do
    and I know you will
    you will know
    I'm making nothing out of something

    and if you never look away from the sky
    you'll find holes up high
    in colourful shades of grey
    that you can make your own
    for after you die

    and if you happen to find
    teardrops on tree tips
    ... and a leaf or two
    against the great white
    you may even cry
    and for a moment
    hold your breath
    and forever
    ...close your eyes

    and if you love the one hidden inside
    you'll never again sleep
    not even after you die
    This just made tears fall.... I've said it before, beautiful. Love it!
  • acrossssSsssshittt
    acrossssSsssshittt Posts: 1,014
    thank you ms. wes. for your appreciation as always.

    There's just so much suffering in this world, emotional, mental and physical, and those suffering need to find some peace... this poem doesn't go anywhere near halfway towards satisfying that need, but I hope it's something

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