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he.who.forgets
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my wife and i had an argument and after she locked me out of the bedroom i decided to drink and write a poem...Here goes, please dont take literally...just some emotions spilling onto the page. Your thoughts?
Slamming Doors, Screaming Voices
Harsh Tones, Racing Horses
Angry Words and Violent Actions,
Consequences for infractions
Push me pull me,
I wont budge.
Start a fight, hold a grudge.
Against you, I'll hold my ground.
Compromise, I have not found.
Rise against the voice that differs,
Hear again, I'll grow but stiffer.
Deeper in my hole you'll find me.
All alone, no one beside me.
The darker it gets, the less I see,
The love that once rest in me.
I need your love to see again,
the places dear, that we've once been.
Help me now before I fail...
to find the love that once prevailed.
help me
again, i dont claim a poet or songwriter, just distraught, sad, and a bit drunk. I need objective therapy from my pj family. thanks
Slamming Doors, Screaming Voices
Harsh Tones, Racing Horses
Angry Words and Violent Actions,
Consequences for infractions
Push me pull me,
I wont budge.
Start a fight, hold a grudge.
Against you, I'll hold my ground.
Compromise, I have not found.
Rise against the voice that differs,
Hear again, I'll grow but stiffer.
Deeper in my hole you'll find me.
All alone, no one beside me.
The darker it gets, the less I see,
The love that once rest in me.
I need your love to see again,
the places dear, that we've once been.
Help me now before I fail...
to find the love that once prevailed.
help me
again, i dont claim a poet or songwriter, just distraught, sad, and a bit drunk. I need objective therapy from my pj family. thanks
We were but stones your light made us stars
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put on a slow, dumb show for you
and crack you up
so you can put a blue ribbon on my brain
god I'm very, very frightening
and I'll overdo it'
The poem is GREAT! I seriously wish I could express myself like that in written word. I am sorry you had a fight with your wife. You will reach a point someday that you realize how important you are to each other and the arguments are over stupid shit.
I had a profound experience tonight that I wish I could let out like you did. I go on an annual vacation with girlfriends for a week every year. We were out all day, saw the wild mustangs, but were driving in a car for HOURS. I am claustrophobic, and we finally found a place to stop. We go into a bar and "I Am Mine" is playing. I am shocked. They are not serving food still, so the other two girls get pissed and want to leave right away. I am like...this song...I have it tattooed on my wrist...and they did not give a shit or get it at all. It was sad.
Seriously. how random is it to walk into a bar on the outer banks in NC and have "I Am Mine" playing. It was surreal,.
Sorry to vent in your thread! LOVED your poem. Wish I had your talent! Now go work your way into that unlocked door and kiss your wife!
What part of the song is tattooed, the title? Anyway, I see how that could be extremely frustrating....most of our friends don't understand..and it's okay..
put on a slow, dumb show for you
and crack you up
so you can put a blue ribbon on my brain
god I'm very, very frightening
and I'll overdo it'
That is weird, sorry...so none of them understood? But in the very least they should know that it's extremely important to you, even if they don't get it....most of my friends know of my obsession and thus know they would be forced to stay for a song or two in your situation
put on a slow, dumb show for you
and crack you up
so you can put a blue ribbon on my brain
god I'm very, very frightening
and I'll overdo it'
Yeah...well, the bar had stopped serving food and they were hungry. I guess that is more important. Yes, they do know of my obsession...thus, the surreal experience and it made me think. When I think now, I feel like I am the lucky one...
I am SOOOOOO sorry for taking over this thread.
Don't feel sorry as this thread is dead anyway....on second thought, food is extremely important, especially when drunk and staggering....I need to get something....and soon..
put on a slow, dumb show for you
and crack you up
so you can put a blue ribbon on my brain
god I'm very, very frightening
and I'll overdo it'