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Thoughts_Arrive
Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
edited November 2015 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
https://soundcloud.com/mario-k-84

Newest songs (and probably my best efforts):



Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    edited November 2015
    I just listened to Sunshine Soul Radiates. I like the guitar part.

    I am wondering what's going on with the vocal part though. Is there an echo effect or do you have two tracks on the vocal part? The reason I'm asking is that the second part makes it kind of drag and hard to understand the words. Is that what you were going for or were you just trying to beef up the vocal part?

    I think the song might improve if you tightened up the relationship between the parts.
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  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    edited November 2015
    justam said:

    I just listened to Sunshine Soul Radiates. I like the guitar part.

    I am wondering what's going on with the vocal part though. Is there an echo effect or do you have two tracks on the vocal part? The reason I'm asking is that the second part makes it kind of drag and hard to understand the words. Is that what you were going for or were you just trying to beef up the vocal part?

    I think the song might improve if you tightened up the relationship between the parts.

    Hi, Thank you for your feedback.
    I double tracked the vocals. I like double tracking so I was aiming to beef it up.
    The lyrics are published.
    I am now working on fixing it on Audacity. My friend who is good at using this program gave me some tips on using the EQ to get the right sound for my voice.
    I will upload again once fixed.
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    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    wow. just listened to My Friend--there are so many things I like about it including the melody, the chords, your voice, the tempo changes. i think its a great song, I'm glad I listened :yin_yang:
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    p.s. I love audacity too. it looks daunting at first but there are a few YouTube tutorials that explain the essentials
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    edited November 2015
    just listened to Sunshine Soul Radiates. the melody in this song is so beautiful. i can hear all the other instrument parts in my mind. this is such an awesome song, . thanks for putting it up. I like the title too
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  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    edited November 2015
    After some helpful feedback I have made some adjustments to my song.
    Here is version 2.
    Tightened the vocal double tracking, added EQ to my vocals, and brought the volume of the guitar up a few dB's.
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    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    rollings said:

    wow. just listened to My Friend--there are so many things I like about it including the melody, the chords, your voice, the tempo changes. i think its a great song, I'm glad I listened :yin_yang:

    I feel so happy that you like it.
    I hate the sound of my voice, wish I sounded and could sing better (I probably could but can't afford lessons right now). I guess every singer hates his/her voice eg. John Lennon.
    I'm glad you like it.
    Big thank you!
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    rollings said:

    p.s. I love audacity too. it looks daunting at first but there are a few YouTube tutorials that explain the essentials

    Yeah, too many controls. My friend explained some of it to me and told me what to search for on YouTube.
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    rollings said:

    just listened to Sunshine Soul Radiates. the melody in this song is so beautiful. i can hear all the other instrument parts in my mind. this is such an awesome song, . thanks for putting it up. I like the title too

    I feel chuffed, thank you so much :)
    I wasn't sure if the title was good, thank you!
    I have a Bandcamp too if you want to download it :)
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    Two more songs done this week.

    Acoustic singer-songwrite type


    Punk grunge type
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    I like the Invisible Man.

    I have a couple of suggestions to tweak it-->

    Have a big diminuendo at the end rather than keeping the vocals so audible.

    Also, I think it'd be really great if you could have some kind of texture change or dreamy instrumental break (no vocals) in the middle of the song to evoke the "invisible" idea. Use different instruments in that part. Something with more space in it.

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  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    justam said:

    I like the Invisible Man.

    I have a couple of suggestions to tweak it-->

    Have a big diminuendo at the end rather than keeping the vocals so audible.

    Also, I think it'd be really great if you could have some kind of texture change or dreamy instrumental break (no vocals) in the middle of the song to evoke the "invisible" idea. Use different instruments in that part. Something with more space in it.

    Thank you :-)
    Interesting suggestions. Yeah I think my vocals at the end could be a bit softer.
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • rollings
    rollings unknown Posts: 7,127
    very cool screaming image

  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    rollings said:

    very cool screaming image

    I hurt my voice doing that. My throat was sore for a few days. Thanks!

    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014

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