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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    electricxlovex wrote:


    Eat Your (He)Art Out

    A white washed wall
    Imperfect. Spots of its
    Past visible, hazy and covered.
    Blue, red, yellow, lilac,
    Flash of orange, green hypnosis.
    History peers, it reaches
    Desperately, clawing its way
    Through layer after layer,
    To no avail.

    A painting - young woman
    Handsome of face, small
    stature. Reflection, piercing
    Through the glass, empty frame of a
    Windowsill. Features incandescent,
    Eyes burning with life, glazed
    With reverie and hope. Vanity.
    Yet old and stale - the oil dry,
    Crusting, crumbling as
    I touch my finger to the surface,
    To share, join, take the naivety
    To no avail.

    Further back, another body, female
    Sitting on a stone cold bench,
    Watching on, faceless observer
    Guardian of the golden.
    She is unknown, hidden
    by the blur, the rush
    Of paint, hastily applied. Afterthought.
    Mystery blends with the flowers, sweet.
    Their stems and leaves holding
    Her, enclosing her, child. Arms
    Stretched, summer's nothingness reigns,
    She grasps at stifled, hot air.
    Trying to catch her dreams
    To no avail.


    Just reading your first poem here electricxlovex. I'm impressed!!! I hoped you would share some writing with us, and I hope you share some more in the future. It gets less scary the more you do it!

    Some great lines in this one, very evocative

    This was my favourite part:

    She is unknown, hidden
    by the blur, the rush
    Of paint, hastily applied. Afterthought.
    Mystery blends with the flowers, sweet.
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  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    YAY i gots another peom :D im happy again
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    PJFAN1997 enjoy every second of it,life is such a cool journey with good times bad times but when you look back you can say "whahooooooo what blast !' that was cool.

    Godfather.
  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    Godfather. wrote:
    PJFAN1997 enjoy every second of it,life is such a cool journey with good times bad times but when you look back you can say "whahooooooo what blast !' that was cool.

    Godfather.
    thanks :D i try to have as much fun as possible, ill keep that advice wih me forever
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Godfather. wrote:
    PJFAN1997 enjoy every second of it,life is such a cool journey with good times bad times but when you look back you can say "whahooooooo what blast !' that was cool.

    Godfather.


    Wise words!

    I greatly enjoyed your last poem here btw.

    Just catching up with this thread!
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  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    pearljamfan-1997 ....
    my advice,
    save all the mementos, decades later they will lie in the palm of your hand....

    1000 ft. closet

    Away from the world, I have saved my world,

    no panes to see through just the years all gone.

    My life in my 1000 ft. closet.


    On the hangers, places traveled, events passed.

    A notched wicker basket, filled with mementos.

    Destined never to forgot, they lie in the palm of my hand....


    A single red rose pin, my Mother's passing.

    Little pink dress, satin shoes, my daughter's birth.


    A shell peanut, whose tiny face drawn carefully,

    marks the size of our unborn son.

    Forever it smiles at me, made blurry,

    by my tears that always come.


    A tiny tooth fairy pillow, dusty and faded

    once held the dreams and the smiles of my child.

    High heeled shoes of past dances

    and a wedding dress 30 years old,

    loves celebration renewed.

    Lessons learned, some never learned.

    Lies told, actions forgiven....

    hope never lost.

    Here safe from the world, I have saved my world,

    my life in my 1000 ft closet
  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    pandora wrote:
    pearljamfan-1997 ....
    my advice,
    save all the mementos, decades later they will lie in the palm of your hand....

    1000 ft. closet

    Away from the world, I have saved my world,

    no panes to see through just the years all gone.

    My life in my 1000 ft. closet.


    On the hangers, places traveled, events passed.

    A notched wicker basket, filled with mementos.

    Destined never to forgot, they lie in the palm of my hand....


    A single red rose pin, my Mother's passing.

    Little pink dress, satin shoes, my daughter's birth.


    A shell peanut, whose tiny face drawn carefully,

    marks the size of our unborn son.

    Forever it smiles at me, made blurry,

    by my tears that always come.


    A tiny tooth fairy pillow, dusty and faded

    once held the dreams and the smiles of my child.

    High heeled shoes of past dances

    and a wedding dress 30 years old,

    loves celebration renewed.

    Lessons learned, some never learned.

    Lies told, actions forgiven....

    hope never lost.

    Here safe from the world, I have saved my world,

    my life in my 1000 ft closet
    thats deffinately going in my momentos and what he wrote me today:
    Dalton :
    Its all because of you That all my dreams come true You are always there to brighten my day and make me happy in your own special way You dont know how much I care Whenever you need me I will be there No body is special for me except you I love you so much and its really true. Your smile awakens my soul, As the sun awakens the day. A kiss and my life is yours, It seems a fair price to pay. Your touch arouses my senses, As the moon arouses the night. Your heart endures all emotion, As the sky endures all the stars. Love me and we'll have eternity, There is no greater love than ours. (This is what i did in English class<3)

    Dalton :
    Your Perfect* Because everything you do Makes me smile… Because every second I spend with you Is worthwhile.. Because when you laugh at me I laugh too Because everyone else can see That I’m devoted to you.. Because I love your eyes and the way they shine… Because you don’t tell lies and you’re so beautiful when you whine.. Because when you get mad You can’t hide it.. Because even when you’re sad I can find it.., your spirits so free and you’re so dang fine! Because I never stop thinking about you.. Its not fair.. Because you’re just perfect and no one else can compare… I Love You Callen<3

    it kinda got wired at the end but i tried :D
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    tremors wrote:
    Godfather. wrote:
    PJFAN1997 enjoy every second of it,life is such a cool journey with good times bad times but when you look back you can say "whahooooooo what blast !' that was cool.

    Godfather.


    Wise words!

    I greatly enjoyed your last poem here btw.

    Just catching up with this thread!

    thank you very much ! that was a nice thing to see to start the new day.

    Godfather.
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    God I'm feeling so loved-up reading the last page of this thread! There's going to be an outbreak of hugging soon. I think I need to go and stick on some Black Sabbath ;)
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  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    lol tremors i am at skool in civics class bored as hell.... yawn :lol: how kan the teacher not notice?????
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    pearljamfan-1997 wrote:
    lol tremors i am at skool in civics class bored as hell.... yawn :lol: how kan the teacher not notice?????


    Make some good use of your time, and write your bf a poem!!

    We'll tell you what we think of it ;)
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  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    tremors wrote:
    pearljamfan-1997 wrote:
    lol tremors i am at skool in civics class bored as hell.... yawn :lol: how kan the teacher not notice?????


    Make some good use of your time, and write your bf a poem!!

    We'll tell you what we think of it ;)
    lol ill post it after skool Dannaca is flipping out check on the whats on ur mind right now thread at my post lol
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    pearljamfan-1997 wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    pearljamfan-1997 wrote:
    lol tremors i am at skool in civics class bored as hell.... yawn :lol: how kan the teacher not notice?????


    Make some good use of your time, and write your bf a poem!!

    We'll tell you what we think of it ;)
    lol ill post it after skool Dannaca is flipping out check on the whats on ur mind right now thread at my post lol


    I see! Be careful of this internet place - you need to protect your P-R-I-V-A-C-Y
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  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    tremors wrote:
    pearljamfan-1997 wrote:
    [quote="tremorslol tremors i am at skool in civics class bored as hell.... yawn :lol: how kan the teacher not notice?????

    Make some good use of your time, and write your bf a poem!!

    We'll tell you what we think of it ;)
    lol ill post it after skool Dannaca is flipping out check on the whats on ur mind right now thread at my post lol


    I see! Be careful of this internet place - you need to protect your P-R-I-V-A-C-Y[/quote]
    oh sorry... i was in a hurry :? :oops: ill watch it

    i love u
    i love the things you do
    i love the way u put ur arm around me
    and how u hold my hand
    i love the way u look at me
    be4 u make a move
    i love the way u wright me poems
    and how they make me feel so right
    i love the way u smell
    and how ur lips feel on mine
    i love the way u laugh
    and how u try 2 hide ur smile
    i love that u think
    that im worth wile
    i love the way u tell me my eyes r pretty
    and every time u say so
    i blush, i must admit it
    i love the way u look
    i love the way u feel
    i love the way u r
    and tht r love is real
    i love the way ur voice cracks [:lol::lol::lol: ]
    and how ur so sweet
    i love the way u treat me
    and everything u do
    but all in all its as simple as this
    i love you :D



    okay, well dont tell me im not in love cuz its teenage love lol see:
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    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown
  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    THE I'S OF LOVE


    The I's of love . . .

    not always soft and shining

    reflecting a beauty

    of hearts desire and need.

    No . . .


    As many things I can be ... so can the I's of love.



    Sunken, discouraged, beaten and resentful.

    Bitter, distrusting, suspicious and insecure.


    As many things you can be ... so can the I's of love.



    Glazed, forbidden, disrespectful and ashamed.

    Sullen, deceitful, cynical and defensive.

    Empty, skeptical, jealous and judgemental.



    As many things we can be ... so can the I's of love.


    The I's of love see the truth ... the truth is in the love.

    I Love You . . .
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    This thread should be retitled the 'Let's get all mushy' thread. Your poem Pandora is honest and dark though. I like it!

    Thank God I am not in love currently - but let me see if I can compose my own sort of love poem for you!!


    The day you said goodbye
    I was waiting in all day
    You said you had made something for me
    Something to mark our time together
    A part of you, to go with what we had together
    We had something sacred but we burned so bright
    We almost burned each other out
    You chose normality
    And I chose to still love you
    And still I find it impossible to bear you any ill

    I never saw you again
    But I found on my doorstep a tapestry
    Colours rich and woven in gold, green and amber
    Something living breathing, growing
    A tree under glass
    You must have stayed up for nights making it for me
    While every night I tried to reach you
    I realise why you never answered my calls

    But even now I don't know which I would have wished for more
    Something lifelong, hanging on my wall
    Or just one chance, to say a last goodbye
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

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  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    tremors wrote:
    This thread should be retitled the 'Let's get all mushy' thread. Your poem Pandora is honest and dark though. I like it!

    Thank God I am not in love currently - but let me see if I can compose my own sort of love poem for you!!


    The day you said goodbye
    I was waiting in all day
    You said you had made something for me
    Something to mark our time together
    A part of you, to go with what we had together
    We had something sacred but we burned so bright
    We almost burned each other out
    You chose normality
    And I chose to still love you
    And still I find it impossible to bear you any ill

    I never saw you again
    But I found on my doorstep a tapestry
    Colours rich and woven in gold, green and amber
    Something living breathing, growing
    A tree under glass
    You must have stayed up for nights making it for me
    While every night I tried to reach you
    I realise why you never answered my calls

    But even now I don't know which I would have wished for more
    Something lifelong, hanging on my wall
    Or just one chance, to say a last goodbye
    :lol: Does this surprise you? Some might say I'm the 'mush' queen ;)

    Your poem is beautiful, I can see it all

    a tree ... like a tree of life... everlasting love
    but you had no choice even in a last goodbye

    very very lovely tremors...

    thank you! :D
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    pandora wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    This thread should be retitled the 'Let's get all mushy' thread. Your poem Pandora is honest and dark though. I like it!

    Thank God I am not in love currently - but let me see if I can compose my own sort of love poem for you!!


    The day you said goodbye
    I was waiting in all day
    You said you had made something for me
    Something to mark our time together
    A part of you, to go with what we had together
    We had something sacred but we burned so bright
    We almost burned each other out
    You chose normality
    And I chose to still love you
    And still I find it impossible to bear you any ill

    I never saw you again
    But I found on my doorstep a tapestry
    Colours rich and woven in gold, green and amber
    Something living breathing, growing
    A tree under glass
    You must have stayed up for nights making it for me
    While every night I tried to reach you
    I realise why you never answered my calls

    But even now I don't know which I would have wished for more
    Something lifelong, hanging on my wall
    Or just one chance, to say a last goodbye
    :lol: Does this surprise you? Some might say I'm the 'mush' queen ;)

    Your poem is beautiful, I can see it all

    a tree ... like a tree of life... everlasting love
    but you had no choice even in a last goodbye

    very very lovely tremors...

    thank you! :D


    Yes, it is probably the most beautiful thing I own, but I can't always see it through the pangs.

    You used to be the Mush Queen maybe, but these days you're on a whole other level. I think it's since you stopped writing while under the influence of the booze! ;)
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  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    tremors wrote:
    pandora wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    This thread should be retitled the 'Let's get all mushy' thread. Your poem Pandora is honest and dark though. I like it!

    Thank God I am not in love currently - but let me see if I can compose my own sort of love poem for you!!


    The day you said goodbye
    I was waiting in all day
    You said you had made something for me
    Something to mark our time together
    A part of you, to go with what we had together
    We had something sacred but we burned so bright
    We almost burned each other out
    You chose normality
    And I chose to still love you
    And still I find it impossible to bear you any ill

    I never saw you again
    But I found on my doorstep a tapestry
    Colours rich and woven in gold, green and amber
    Something living breathing, growing
    A tree under glass
    You must have stayed up for nights making it for me
    While every night I tried to reach you
    I realise why you never answered my calls

    But even now I don't know which I would have wished for more
    Something lifelong, hanging on my wall
    Or just one chance, to say a last goodbye
    :lol: Does this surprise you? Some might say I'm the 'mush' queen ;)

    Your poem is beautiful, I can see it all

    a tree ... like a tree of life... everlasting love
    but you had no choice even in a last goodbye

    very very lovely tremors...

    thank you! :D


    Yes, it is probably the most beautiful thing I own, but I can't always see it through the pangs.

    You used to be the Mush Queen maybe, but these days you're on a whole other level. I think it's since you stopped writing while under the influence of the booze! ;)
    :lol: probably!

    right you are .... a lovey dovey drunk am I! :lol:
  • pearljamfan-1997
    pearljamfan-1997 Posts: 269
    tremors wrote:
    This thread should be retitled the 'Let's get all mushy' thread. Your poem Pandora is honest and dark though. I like it!

    Thank God I am not in love currently - but let me see if I can compose my own sort of love poem for you!!


    The day you said goodbye
    I was waiting in all day
    You said you had made something for me
    Something to mark our time together
    A part of you, to go with what we had together
    We had something sacred but we burned so bright
    We almost burned each other out
    You chose normality
    And I chose to still love you
    And still I find it impossible to bear you any ill

    I never saw you again
    But I found on my doorstep a tapestry
    Colours rich and woven in gold, green and amber
    Something living breathing, growing
    A tree under glass
    You must have stayed up for nights making it for me
    While every night I tried to reach you
    I realise why you never answered my calls

    But even now I don't know which I would have wished for more
    Something lifelong, hanging on my wall
    Or just one chance, to say a last goodbye
    beeeee utyful tremors :D
    “I told you from the start just how this would end. When I get what I want, I never want it again.” — Courtney Love

    “If he doesn’t treat you like a princess, then he doesn’t deserve to be your prince.” — Unknown

    “And we’ll move on and go our separate ways. Just know, I’ll miss you everyday, but things just aren’t the same.” — Unknown

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