Let's Get Creative

electricxlovex wrote:

tremors wrote:

I might try writing more in this style, and in the style of the other one you commented on recently. The real question though electricxlovex...... is..... when are we going to see some of your poetry? I know you got some stashed away somewhere.....

very cool, can't wait to read more of your stuff, seriously I love it
I've been trying to find a good book of poetry - recently read Sylvia Plath's "Ariel" which I liked a lot and then other poets like Robert Burns - but the poetry on here, particularly yours tremors, has been all I need.
Haha you're so sure that I write poetry? How did you come to that conclusion?

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

no more, no more
its beating me blue
i wear to much black
to secrative
to bad

im tired of middle
and tired of school
i know every teen feels as i do
but im so paranoid of what you think
but i dont care as long as im me?

im scared of you
you think i spend all my time
puting on eyeliner
and straightening my hair
but isnt a dad supposed to see threw me?
know enough by being there?
do you know my favorite book?
song?
did you no my favorite guitar is a les paul?
if you opend your eyes
u wouldnt belive what you saw

damn that boys cute
he asks me out i say yes
i thought it was a dream come true
he asks me to the dance i go with glee
than i cant believe what i see
him telling that girl
that me and him are over
done
im old news
i stare at my shoes
and begin to cry
i cant believe i liked this guy
and i cant belive that girl was my best friend

im over him were just friends
im chillin with my clique
my better bff
looks at me says
he just ditched us wat an ass
lets not talk
lets not speak
forget him its just you and me
he nos were mad
he doesnt care
than my better bff gets mad at me
cuz she jelous her crush is crushing on me
im sorry im sorry
i tell him off
than i see her sitting with the ass
who ditched us like were trash

i feel alone
so alone
forgotten

i turn to my best buddie for years
who just moved to florida
i miss im much
but than he says
we cant stay in touch
he has a new best buddie
he says sorry

im the only one whos sorry
my world is crumbling down
can no one see
that i sit in my room currled up
righting my songs and crying them out
looking for an escape
help me get threw the day

i have one more friend
but his gf and him are going bad
i listen to him vent
his shoulder to cry on
but i need help

i dont dare ask
i dont dare cry
listen to me
because its not the tears that measure the pain
its the smile we fake
to show others were ok

this is my cry
this is me begging
i cant take it
im about to loose











-i have had the worst week ever

pandora wrote:

the wolf wrote:

'The Wrong Goodbye'

One word through
clenched teeth

single tear wets our lips.

Fearful eyes mirrored
worn by decades lost,

locked now in a forever gaze.

Cold heart, cold stone
chiseled by our sins,

Unspoken, Unforgiven.




Warm hands reunited
melt pain, leave behind shame.

Eternal hearts healed.

One word through
a smile....

'Hello'

again Dad.

tremors wrote:

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

no more, no more
its beating me blue
i wear to much black
to secrative
to bad

im tired of middle
and tired of school
i know every teen feels as i do
but im so paranoid of what you think
but i dont care as long as im me?

im scared of you
you think i spend all my time
puting on eyeliner
and straightening my hair
but isnt a dad supposed to see threw me?
know enough by being there?
do you know my favorite book?
song?
did you no my favorite guitar is a les paul?
if you opend your eyes
u wouldnt belive what you saw

damn that boys cute
he asks me out i say yes
i thought it was a dream come true
he asks me to the dance i go with glee
than i cant believe what i see
him telling that girl
that me and him are over
done
im old news
i stare at my shoes
and begin to cry
i cant believe i liked this guy
and i cant belive that girl was my best friend

im over him were just friends
im chillin with my clique
my better bff
looks at me says
he just ditched us wat an ass
lets not talk
lets not speak
forget him its just you and me
he nos were mad
he doesnt care
than my better bff gets mad at me
cuz she jelous her crush is crushing on me
im sorry im sorry
i tell him off
than i see her sitting with the ass
who ditched us like were trash

i feel alone
so alone
forgotten

i turn to my best buddie for years
who just moved to florida
i miss im much
but than he says
we cant stay in touch
he has a new best buddie
he says sorry

im the only one whos sorry
my world is crumbling down
can no one see
that i sit in my room currled up
righting my songs and crying them out
looking for an escape
help me get threw the day

i have one more friend
but his gf and him are going bad
i listen to him vent
his shoulder to cry on
but i need help

i dont dare ask
i dont dare cry
listen to me
because its not the tears that measure the pain
its the smile we fake
to show others were ok

this is my cry
this is me begging
i cant take it
im about to loose











-i have had the worst week ever

Stay strong Pearl Jam Fan

tremors wrote:

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

no more, no more
its beating me blue
i wear to much black
to secrative
to bad

im tired of middle
and tired of school
i know every teen feels as i do
but im so paranoid of what you think
but i dont care as long as im me?

im scared of you
you think i spend all my time
puting on eyeliner
and straightening my hair
but isnt a dad supposed to see threw me?
know enough by being there?
do you know my favorite book?
song?
did you no my favorite guitar is a les paul?
if you opend your eyes
u wouldnt belive what you saw

damn that boys cute
he asks me out i say yes
i thought it was a dream come true
he asks me to the dance i go with glee
than i cant believe what i see
him telling that girl
that me and him are over
done
im old news
i stare at my shoes
and begin to cry
i cant believe i liked this guy
and i cant belive that girl was my best friend

im over him were just friends
im chillin with my clique
my better bff
looks at me says
he just ditched us wat an ass
lets not talk
lets not speak
forget him its just you and me
he nos were mad
he doesnt care
than my better bff gets mad at me
cuz she jelous her crush is crushing on me
im sorry im sorry
i tell him off
than i see her sitting with the ass
who ditched us like were trash

i feel alone
so alone
forgotten

i turn to my best buddie for years
who just moved to florida
i miss im much
but than he says
we cant stay in touch
he has a new best buddie
he says sorry

im the only one whos sorry
my world is crumbling down
can no one see
that i sit in my room currled up
righting my songs and crying them out
looking for an escape
help me get threw the day

i have one more friend
but his gf and him are going bad
i listen to him vent
his shoulder to cry on
but i need help

i dont dare ask
i dont dare cry
listen to me
because its not the tears that measure the pain
its the smile we fake
to show others were ok

this is my cry
this is me begging
i cant take it
im about to loose














http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OPDFy4gxVRc&feature=fvst

tremors wrote:

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

looking into darkness
notebook balanced on my knees
i wait to see
into what i will be

taken away
high from my writing
outcast, but everyone looks at me
freak of nature

snickers and disgust
surrounding me
look for confort
in times of need

used to know better love
friends sorround me
then caught in my lies
my ground falls under me

one by one they drop away
leaving me in this place
God's revenge for who i am,
not even he accepts me

avenged by him
labels im used to
but not did i ever
play with those voodoo dolls to kill

used to be innocent
used to be cool
but i was dropped
than found who i am

found were i belong
but now i have learned
to be what i am
there will always be a part of me that is alone

This is great I think

electricxlovex wrote:

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

looking into darkness
notebook balanced on my knees
i wait to see
into what i will be

taken away
high from my writing
outcast, but everyone looks at me
freak of nature

snickers and disgust
surrounding me
look for confort
in times of need

used to know better love
friends sorround me
then caught in my lies
my ground falls under me

one by one they drop away
leaving me in this place
God's revenge for who i am,
not even he accepts me

avenged by him
labels im used to
but not did i ever
play with those voodoo dolls to kill

used to be innocent
used to be cool
but i was dropped
than found who i am

found were i belong
but now i have learned
to be what i am
there will always be a part of me that is alone

woah, loved this

specially

taken away
high from my writing...

God's revenge for who i am,
not even he accepts me...

used to be cool
but i was dropped
than found who i am

found were i belong
but now i have learned
to be what i am
there will always be a part of me that is alone

those parts,
striking words that feel as though I could have also written them, i relate so much
Gods revenge for who i am - beautiful, seriously

School has become very hard, a battlefield almost, specially the last two years. I know and understand what you may be going through
I hope you're okay, if you need someone to talk to I'm here
It's been a rough week for me too, not just at school
Please don't hesitate if you want to talk
and keep writing, your stuff is incredible. Very refreshing - I haven't read much stuff from someone our age that has been this inspiring, this intriguing

pearljamfan-1997 wrote:

rules of life:

1. always bring spare guitar strings
2. boys are stupid, they always have been and they always will
3. never eat cafeteria mexican pizza
4. never hang out with anyone that wants you to change
5. forget what others think and stand up for what you believe
6. just because you know hes not good for you doesnt mean you'll stay away, your heart always wins and if your brain ends up being right you'll just beat yourself up with it, so don't label and act like you know a person.