Reflections From the Beach

reeferchief
reeferchief Posts: 3,569
edited December 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Watch the waves
come and go
closer, further
ebb and flow

pictures in my mind
memorys of you
where you went
what made you to

the oceans made me
I blame them too
but the waves soothe me
as I watch them move

this heart is broken
ripped up and torn
but my mind is open
hoping for a return
Can not be arsed with life no more.
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  • Kushikushun
    Kushikushun Posts: 1,263
    reeferchief wrote:
    Watch the waves
    come and go
    closer, further
    ebb and flow

    pictures in my mind
    memorys of you
    where you went
    what made you to

    the oceans made me
    I blame them too
    but the waves soothe me
    as I watch them move

    this heart is broken
    ripped up and torn
    but my mind is open
    hoping for a return


    Nice flow of words...only at the end it gets stuck somehow.. Hope you dont mind me saying so. Like it!
    Why not be mediocre and be the best at it that you can be?
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    reeferchief wrote:
    Watch the waves
    come and go
    closer, further
    ebb and flow

    pictures in my mind
    memorys of you
    where you went
    what made you to

    the oceans made me
    I blame them too
    but the waves soothe me
    as I watch them move

    this heart is broken
    ripped up and torn
    but my mind is open
    hoping for a return

    I like the way you write when your mind is feeling open. :)

    I can imagine these waves soothing me too.
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  • deadnote
    deadnote Posts: 1,678
    i dig it
    flows throughout
    set your laughter free

    dreamer in my dream

    we got the guns

    i love you,but im..............callin out.........callin out

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