Bob Dylan challenge......

ISN
ISN Posts: 1,700
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
ya know the way Dylan's lyrics are so great......like beat.....rhyming......etc......can anyone write a long peom like 'tangled up in blue' (see sevensins thread)......about something.......something that music could be added to......I'll try, but not right now......my bird is cooking.....;).....and I ain't had enough wine yet.......of my shoes.....tangled up in blue
....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    in the graveyards of new orleans...
    you tripped and skinned your shins....
    and shouted whoever trips wins
    and I knew then we were losers
    in the graveyards of new orleans.....

    in the graveyards of new orleans
    we were high on natural things
    on vodka, whisky and jim beam
    we cursed and whupped and cried and screamed
    in the graveyards of new orleans

    in the graveyards of new orleans
    mardi gras had bin and gone
    and beads were getting very long
    and we passed round a fruity bong
    in the graveyards of new orleans

    in the graveyards of new orleans
    I'd met you when you were just thirteen
    and dirty face, your soul was clean
    and I was just a teenage queen
    a vampire, looking for some spleen
    in the graveyards of new orleans

    you flowered....like a corsage
    and your beauty grew with your age
    when I saw you with your husband
    I grew so mean
    in the graveyards of new orleans......

    he was driving a harley
    and a real hell-chugging chopper bike....
    his hair was long and curly
    and dark and you looked at him as though you'd never seen
    me before,
    in the graveyards of new orleans.....

    I saw a marble angel and I broke some flower pots
    and it jus goes to show that lot's
    wife always dies and turns to salt
    and really as we left Sodom
    why did you look back at the scene
    in the graveyards of new orleans?

    (inspired by easy rider)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Very beautiful... flows like a stream
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    feels like a dream.....or a dram.....heheheheheh.......thx honey.....:)....I was worried about it.....I might do a better one when I'm not so wasted......but all you lot - give it a go......now Bob Dylan really is a 'master'.......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • sevensins
    sevensins Posts: 887
    if you want to write a dylan song just imagine him singing it...lol
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I wrote this one when I was fourteen, influenced by Bob:

    Actually, here's the first verse only, influenced by Motorpsycho Nitemare and 115th Dream:

    Well, on Sunday afternoon I was a -sleepin' on the steps
    of an ancient Georgian house that a kleptomaniac kept
    I was swiggin' from a bottle of lysergic neat
    when a munchkin from the alley came and chopped off both my feet
    I wound up in a madhouse, I was screamin' for a nurse
    when the doc said "He's a gonner", and went to call a hearse

    There's a load more verses, but ya get the idea!

    :)
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    that's jus the kind of thing I wanted to write......but I came up with that crappy peom......I like it - nurse/hearse......post the rest of the verses.....:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    ISN wrote:
    that's jus the kind of thing I wanted to write......but I came up with that crappy peom......I like it - nurse/hearse......post the rest of the verses.....:)

    I need to go up into the loft and dig my early lyrics out out, but I really will. You know, I'm proud of all my teenage Dylan influenced stuff! Dylan's brilliant. :)

    By the way, ISN, I'm not plugging, but did you ever check out meee songs? :)

    http://www.myspace.com/crinnish

    :)
  • here's one I wrote when I was constantley listening to "Sad Eyed Lady Of The Low Lands" Took me about 15 minutes to write. It's not very good now that I read it. But oh well


    I waited for you when you didn't write
    But you sent me a tape that was so concise
    She had my child when I was just a kid
    I asked her questions but kept the truth well hid
    She told me that I had to go
    We sat and watched the red river flow

    The time is right to tell her that I
    Heard she was with another guy
    I bought you flowers
    And built you a tower
    And there I stood, feeling so well
    As I watched you empire fell

    You seem so peacfull and at ease
    I hate to think you were just a tease
    My hearts been broken, my lips been cracked
    I looked for you underneath the tracks
    I thought you'd be there with you eyes well lit
    But they threw you inside the pit

    Sweet lady that I wan so much
    You're the one I've been thinking of
    Nothing calms me like you touch
    All i want is all your love

    It hurts me bad to watch you walk
    I love your voice everytime you tak
    But you told me it's over and I believed it was
    When I asked you why, you said, "Just because"
    Now I see that you know the truth
    Of everything about my youth

    You were working as a postal clerk
    I met you at your place of birth
    We spent the summer in each other's hands
    She was a little girl then, I didn't understand
    That life can make you, or it can break you
    I'll sing a song for you called "Baby Blue"

    I'm sure you didn't fully comprehend
    The meaning of the letter I had to send
    I'll tell you what I know and believe
    Listen to me before you leave
    I waited for you to give me a kiss
    I hate to see it end like this

    Sweet lady that I want so much
    You're the one I've been thinking of
    Nothing calms me like your touch
    All I want is all your love

    Let's just leave it at goodbye
    I don't want to listen to you cry
    I know that you are happy now
    Can't you see I took my last bow
    Please don't make it any worse
    Up around the corner comes your hearse

    You killed me with a blow to my heart
    I wish we never had a start
    I told you secrets of my past life
    I always wished you'd become my wife
    The backyard's full of gypsy queens
    And faded memories of what you've never been

    The children are grown and have left home
    For a life that you will never know
    I apologize for everything I've done
    And all the prizes that I have won
    I'll wait for you on the mountan top
    My love for you will never stop

    Sweet lady that I want so much
    You're the one I've been thinking of
    Nothing calms me like you touch
    All I want is all your love
    "I'm a thief, and I dig it"
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    thanks.....I like it.....:).....again with the 'hearse'......oh sweet lady.......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • lovin kind
    lovin kind Posts: 268
    i go there to find who i am
    i see the trees and the honor
    the names and the flowers
    the tears for feelings i never knew
    and still im going down into a fire
    still shouting out to everyone my desire
    to save can change a word like desire chorus

    we leave together or burn forever
    as far as i know youve been waiting for 28 years
    who would ever know an idea sprouting out of the word
    and from where i live i could understand the idea
    that i wouldnt ever ask you to follow me
    maybe its the dreams filing grievances
    and reality steps forward out of the darkest sleep
    and becoming the daylight

    i found myself in a world of loss
    i thought i was dead and paying for what i had done
    yet every day even when i hold back the anger
    and hold back the tears
    theres someone who loves
    and sometimes its far away
    its always there though

    i think life is about appreciating love
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    By the way, ISN, I'm not plugging, but did you ever check out meee songs?

    no I didn't, and I am absolutely shocked.....how could I have overlooked something as wonderful as this.....faith in blame......you sound so gorgeous......I can hear the Irish in you.......really professional......the guitar is a bit aggressive, but that's the way I like it......your voice is phenomenal in faith in blame......I'm skipping through the next one, which isn't really a hit.....but faith in blame is a hit.....(if a little bit long)......I didn't finish Westgate in Grey.....but now I'm onto the third one......Richard, sincerely......you are a brilliant musician......hugs n kisses......Cath......the third one is not as good as the first......skipping it.....moving onto the last one....and, yes, I like the last one.....a really confident voice and musician.....this is a brilliant discovery......hell, I'm happy about this :D (I like the last one, but not the second and the third)......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Thanks for listening! :)
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    the pleasure was all mine......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ok I just started this and it's going to be a blues song (I think), and it's rough. This is verse 1 and the/a refrain. I'm posting it here because in my head I hear it kind of like the Dylan "talkies" you might find on "Freewheelin' Bob Dylan." Anywho here goes:

    She said, "But it's Friday night."
    And I told her, "It'll be Friday tomorrow."
    "Get some sleep. It'll be alright."
    And I kept on burning the gas I'd borrowed.

    She wants to make the most of her days;
    Make sure she's drunk come the Last Call.
    Cause money ain't nothing--it's time that pays
    And wasted time ain't time at all.

    (I said) Ya gotta get living...(Yeah, ya gotta get living)
    And that ain't nothing, honey,
    But getting and giving.
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    I especially like the chorus (and I hope it's repeated)......but apart from that, I do like the solidness of it.....it's solid rhyme......not your usual kind.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    I used to own books of Bob Dylan's lyrics, but never an album. I guess I have to go buy an album. It's a great reason to try out this new indie record store I found in Arlington, VA. Any suggestions on CD titles?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • blond on blonde
    desire
    highway





    .....from way back when..
    I am your child, before it is born
    testing your patience, needing your love
    i am your god tell me what your looking for
    I am everywhere why do you look above
    i am your friend in times of need
    I may not show it but inside i bleed
    Everywhere you go, i'm by your side
    Everyone you know has secrets they will hide
    but all the walls will fall over time
    all the walls will fall over time

    an angry river grows more confident
    with each falling drop of rain
    a weak man feels weaker with every ounce of pain
    a strong man seems stronger when he's met with the same
    he can calm the angry river
    that' s swollen from the rain

    ....it makes no sense..or does it...?
    BEEN THERE DONE THAT:

    HARTFORD '96
    HARTFORD '98
    JONES BEACH '00
    PHILADELPHIA '03
    ALBANY '03
    MSG I '03
    MANSFIELD III '03
    HOLMDEL '03
    BOSTON I ' 04
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    Love and Theft
    Bob Dylan Unplugged (3 cd's)

    that's one excellent song......:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • "Love And Theft" (his newest one) is probably the easiest and most enjoyable album he has made. Lots of great musical styles. Great backing band also.

    "Desire" is probably his most accessable (spelling?) album.

    But his most famous albums are:
    "Highway 61 Revisited" (probably his most famous cuz it has the song "Like A Rolling Stone"
    "Blonde On Blonde (probably his best lyrical and musical album and usually considered his masterpiece)
    "The Freewheelin' Bob Dylan" (his second album, completely folk but incredible, includes many famous songs including "Blowin' In The Wind"
    "Blood On The Tracks" (his best from the 70's, very sad and emotional, great lyrics about heartbreak)
    "Bringing It All Back Home" (The first 8 songs are electric with a full band (first time he has done it on record) and the last 4 songs are folk. Magnificent album. Includes the songs "Subterranean Homesick Blues" and "Mr. Tambourine Man")

    You really can't go wrong with any Bob Dylan albums from the 60's and mid 70's

    and if you really get into him I suggest "Another Side Of Bob Dylan." It's his last folk album and it doesn't really have any big famous songs but the whole album is just so hypnotic. It has really great lyrics to. It's his best folk album in my honest opinion, it's also probably his funniest album lyrically)
    "I'm a thief, and I dig it"
  • olderman
    olderman Posts: 1,765
    by the way, The Ballad Of Hollis Brown is a powerful piece.. check out the original.. peace.

    crazed and merry,
    he lived on the outside of town,
    crazed and merry,
    he lived on the outside of town,
    in a house with nine children,
    a foundation crumblin' down.

    no one asked him why he laughed,
    some asked him how you do,
    no one asked him why he laughed,
    some asked him how you do,
    as he kept on with a toothless smile,
    disturbed as it was true.

    in the mountains of kentucky,
    he walks and sells his shine,
    in the mountains of kentucky,
    he walks and sells his shine,
    and yet he brings home nothin'
    to feed his family nine.

    he once worked the coal mines deep,
    in the mountains of his kin,
    he once worked the coal mines deep,
    in the mountains of his kin,
    now he's spit upon and viled,
    by the specter of his sin.

    There's nine breezes blowin'
    All around the cabin door
    There's nine breezes blowin'
    All around the cabin door
    Nine crack shots ring out
    Like the ocean's pounding roar

    There's nine people dead
    In a south Kentucky home
    There's nine people dead
    In a south Kentucky home..
    Somewhere in South Dakota
    There's nine new people born.
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green