Let's write a song.

Ms. Haiku
Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
edited December 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Who knows how to write a song? We need a game plan, strategy, charisma, and intuition. How many syllables? Does it need to rhyme? What should be the topic. Could someone who actually writes songs do the editing so that it makes sense? This person would be asked to revise the drafts after discussions. Anyone up for it? How about a song about listening? I'm open to changes in strategy. Thoughts? Suggestions?
There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    One suggestion. Music. ;)
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    One suggestion. Music. ;)
    See, I was planning on people like you who already write songs, to help out in that department. If someone could do up the music part, and post that the song is fast or slow or needs this many syllables etc, at least we could start a little something, you think?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    See, I was planning on people like you who already write songs, to help out in that department. If someone could do up the music part, and post that the song is fast or slow or needs this many syllables etc, at least we could start a little something, you think?


    Er, okay. I'll play with these chords:

    | Em7 F7 | Bbmaj7 Db7 | Gbmaj7 A7 | Dmaj7

    Later though. I'm busy here. Vacation is over. ;)
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    | Em7 F7 | Bbmaj7 Db7 | Gbmaj7 A7 | Dmaj7
    This song will be about the number 7? Could someone translate this for me. I just need the number of syllables? Should it rhyme?

    I'll start with the words, and please please edit if needed:

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th Street
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Patience, patience. We need the music first. Rome wasn't built in a d





    a








    ;)
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Okay, it's a four four beat. Syncopate as many syllables as you like. I'm getting a nice, cheesy bossa nova thang going here.
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Okay, it's a four four beat. Syncopate as many syllables as you like. I'm getting a nice, cheesy bossa nova thang going here.
    If I remember my oboe lessons correctly, 8 syllables should be just fine, and then in the third line we'll add a little blues hold so that it's 7 syllables. Bossa nova bossa nova bossa nova, let me figure out what that is.

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing gloves of mystic white pearl
    She found answers within shop
    windows adjusting street length curls.

    Is that too light, do you need more brassy? A little help, people (and Fins of course)!
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    If I remember my oboe lessons correctly, 8 syllables should be just fine, and then in the third line we'll add a little blues hold so that it's 7 syllables. Bossa nova bossa nova bossa nova, let me figure out what that is.

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing gloves of mystic white pearl
    She found answers within shop
    windows adjusting street length curls.

    Is that too light, do you need more brassy? A little help, people (and Fins of course)!






    More cowbell!!!
    More cowbell!!!
    More cowbell!!!


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  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing a white pearl cowbell


    Nope, nope, I just can't do it.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Me get good idea
    You could write velly good song
    all in haiku, yes?



    ;)
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Me get good idea
    You could write velly good song
    all in haiku, yes?



    ;)
    I want to write seductive delicious blues! Cowbell is blues, isn't it or maybe bluegrass. Ok, I'll bow out so that someone else could start the first part. Are we going to have one of those things that keep repeating itself - chorus, that's it. Are we going to have a chorus?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Okay, how about a twelve bar:


    Ah woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    yuh
    Ah said uh woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    uh huh
    Ah cleared dem bogeys widdout warnin'
    Ah squashed em out by clampin' mah nose in between two shoes
    in between two shoes, y'uh huh



    :cool::cool:
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Okay, how about a twelve bar:


    Ah woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    yuh
    Ah said uh woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    uh huh
    Ah cleared dem bogeys widdout warnin'
    Ah squashed em out by clampin' mah nose in between two shoes
    in between two shoes, y'uh huh



    :cool::cool:
    I just don't think we are on the same page here, Fins. I can't just can't write a song about items inside noses whether they are hairs, "bogey", peas, pencils, you name it, just can't do it. How about walking . . . and the number 7?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    I just don't think we are on the same page here, Fins. I can't just can't write a song about items inside noses whether they are hairs, "bogey", peas, pencils, you name it, just can't do it. How about walking . . . and the number 7?


    Seven Bogies walking. Set in a Casablanca fan convention. We can do it. And we need seven Ingrid Bergmans too. Seven Bergs for Seven Bogies.
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Seven Bogies walking. Set in a Casablanca fan convention. We can do it. And we need seven Ingrid Bergmans too. Seven Bergs for Seven Bogies.
    That's it!

    You got me laughing there, Fins - Good job!

    Of the seven Bogies (and I take it this is way in the future when cloning has reached a level to clone dead movie actors) which one turns his head away from one of the Ingrid Bergmans and why? That's the ticket, there's the story, you think?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • dunkman
    dunkman Posts: 19,646
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    That's it!

    You got me laughing there, Fins - Good job!

    Of the seven Bogies (and I take it this is way in the future when cloning has reached a level to clone dead movie actors) which one turns his head away from one of the Ingrid Bergmans and why? That's the ticket, there's the story, you think?

    sorry to butt in....

    you have to find out which one of the Bogies runs... ;)

    who is the runny Bogie??
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    dunkman1974 wrote:
    sorry to butt in....

    you have to find out which one of the Bogies runs... ;)

    who is the runny Bogie??
    We're not talking nose issues, right? I just can't deal with nose-issues-laden lyrics. It's like Dirty Frank, which although well done, grosses me out. When I walked along first avenue in Seattle once near Pike Place Market a man had a dripping nose, and I almost threw up.

    I don't know if I've seen a movie with whats-his-name running, but hey, anything is possible.

    If people are really set on doing a song riddled with nose-issues I can step down, and just watch from the sidelines. I'm writing this paragraph in good humor, by the way not sarcasm.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I know a few sea shanties. We could write one. A slow seductive sea shanty.
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    I know a few sea shanties. We could write one. A slow seductive sea shanty.
    Isn't a shanty a hut? Or is it like Gordon Lightfoot songs - The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald? I could do sea stuff, I'll focus on the lighthouse someone else focuses on the water part.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ooo arrrr thricketee:

    http://www.geocities.com/captcutlass/Tune.html


    These be shanties, oooo arrrr.

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